Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the following graph indicates the spending of quality time on individuals during the duration from 1958 to 2008

firstly taking about 1958 era it highlight that 19 percent adults are being together with their blood relations furthermore about 2 percent moved with reference of their work moreover 35% teens are on working mode while 8% are maintain their health at their homes by doing rest . moving towards 2008 the situation entirely different the importance of family get together gradually fall down on other hand individuals love to travel for work for betterment of their livings. looking at sleeping time unfortunately it's also decrease as much burden of work . while due to advancement in technology there is rapid increase in working class due to competition in different fields .on other hand individuals are relaxing at their homes by doing online jobs

so eventually with the development in the field of science and technology their too much change in the daily activities of adults at the time of 1958 peoples have to go for jobs by doing travelling while in 2008 due to remote jobs adults maintain their healthy life but the competition is more advanced as compare to 1958.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to summarize the two pie charts showing how adults spent their time in 1958 and 2008. However, there are significant issues with data interpretation and task fulfillment. For instance, the text claims that '35% teens are on working mode', which misinterprets the category and population specified in the prompt (working adults). Furthermore, key information is vague, and comparisons between the two years lack precision. While the student attempts to highlight main features such as family time and working hours, the overall selection and reporting of data are limited and lack clarity. This places the response in the lower-intermediate range according to the official descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organization of the text is severely hindered by a lack of proper punctuation, capitalization, and paragraphing. The entire response reads as a continuous run-on block with minimal structural division, making it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. Although some basic cohesive devices are attempted, such as 'firstly', 'furthermore', and 'on other hand', their usage is often awkward and repetitive. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the overall arrangement fails to present a clear, logically structured overview of the visual data. This reflects the characteristics of Band 4.0 in coherence and cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and frequently inappropriate for an academic task. Phrases like 'quality time on individuals', 'on working mode', and 'betterment of their livings' demonstrate a lack of precision and poor collocation control. There are also noticeable word-choice errors that strain the reader's understanding, such as using 'teens' instead of 'adults' and confusing 'decrease' with past tense verbs. While the writer attempts some less common words, the frequent inaccuracies in vocabulary restrict the score to Band 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text is characterized by a complete absence of periods, commas, and capital letters, resulting in massive run-on sentences that blur the boundaries of clauses. There are frequent errors in tense consistency, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure, such as 'the situation entirely different' (missing verb) and 'peoples have to go'. Complex structures are attempted but are generally faulty and lack proper punctuation. These persistent, intrusive errors heavily impede communication and place the response at Band 4.0.

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