Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The document below is a pie charts about how working adults in a partucular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008

We observe that the main feature is that the time of workig,relaxing at home and travelling to work are more in 2008 then 1958.

In the other hand the time of sleeping and going to meet family or friends are less in 2008 then 1958.

That percentages show that the life is defferent between 2008 and 1958.Howhever, Adults no have the same intrests in 1958 and 2008 because the generation of 1958 have a good time for sleeping and make relation, but the generation of 2008 prefer to working less, relaxing at home and workig more.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarise the pie charts by mentioning general trends between 1958 and 2008, such as work, relaxing, and travelling. However, there are significant issues regarding task fulfilment. Firstly, the student fails to meet the minimum word count requirement, coming in at only 118 words compared to the required 150 words. Secondly, the information reported contains contradictions and inaccuracies; for example, the text claims that 'the generation of 2008 prefer to working less... and workig more,' which is contradictory. Furthermore, specific data values or percentages are completely omitted, preventing a proper overview of the main features. Therefore, the task is addressed only partially, warranting a band score of 4.0 under the task achievement descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks clear logical organisation and proper paragraphing. The response is presented as a fragmented collection of brief sentences rather than a cohesive report. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as 'In the other hand' instead of 'On the other hand' and 'Howhever'. There is no clear progression of ideas, and referencing between sentences is weak. While the reader can generally identify what the student is referring to, the lack of structured paragraphing and faulty cohesive devices mean the overall arrangement is quite disjointed. This aligns best with the band 4 descriptors for coherence and cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

Vocabulary usage is very basic, repetitive, and restricted. The student uses simple terms like 'time', 'good', and 'different', accompanied by numerous spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'partucular', 'workig', 'defferent', and 'intrests'. There are also awkward collocations, such as 'make relation' instead of 'socialise' or 'spend time with family'. The limited vocabulary range and frequent lexical errors make it difficult for the writer to express precise meanings about statistical data, placing this performance firmly at band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical structures attempted are very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences and basic attempts at complex clauses that are frequently faulty. Examples of grammatical errors include 'Adults no have the same intrests' instead of 'do not have the same interests', and incorrect verb forms like 'prefer to working'. Punctuation and article usage are also inconsistent throughout the short text. Due to the very limited range of structures and frequent errors that occasionally distort the intended meaning, a band score of 4.0 is appropriate.

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