Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The pie chart illustrates how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Overall, The most popular activity in both years is working whereas the least one in 1958 is travelling to work and in 2008 i.e. going out with friends and family.
By looking at pie chart of 1958, in which most popular activity is working which accounted for 33%. Adults spend time secondly on sleeping which accounted for 32%. Third activity adults perform more is going out with friends and family as its accounted for 19%. Relaxing at home accounted for 8% and last 2 and even least activity on which adults spend their day is playing sports accounted for 6% and travelling to work accounted for 2% only.
However, in 2008 also adults spend mostly time in working as it is accounted with 42%. They even put sleeping on second number accounted with 25%. Relaxing at home is third popular activity on which they spend their day is accounted for 13% . Last three activites with lowest proportion are playing sports accounted with 7%, travelling to work also 7% and going out with friends and family accounted with 6% only.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response successfully covers all parts of the prompt by presenting an overview and reporting the main features of both pie charts while making relevant comparisons. The student identifies the most and least popular activities for both years, noting that working was the highest in 1958 (33%) and 2008 (42%). Key data points such as sleeping, relaxing at home, and sports are accurately cited and compared. However, there is a tendency to list data sequentially rather than synthesising all the information into fully developed comparative trends, which keeps the response at a Band 6.0 level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response features an overall coherent arrangement with a clear introduction, overview paragraph, and distinct body paragraphs for each year. Cohesive devices are used to structure the text, such as 'Overall,' 'By looking at pie chart of 1958,' and 'However, in 2008 also.' However, some referencing and linking mechanisms feel mechanical and awkward, such as 'Adults spend time secondly on sleeping' and 'Third activity adults perform more is going out.' Paragraphing is used appropriately, but overall progression could be smoother.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the student to describe percentages and general activities clearly ('illustrates', 'proportion', 'popular activity'). However, there is noticeable repetition of basic verbs and phrasing, such as 'accounted for', 'spend their day', and 'spend mostly time in working'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary like 'proportion', but word choice and collocation errors are present, such as 'least 2 and even least activity' and 'put sleeping on second number'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as relative clauses ('how working adults... spent their time') and subordinate clauses. However, grammatical errors occur frequently throughout the text, including tense shifts ('is working', 'spent their time in 1958'), preposition errors ('spend mostly time in working'), and awkward phrasing ('as it is accounted with 42%'). While these errors do not impede overall communication, they restrict the score to a Band 5.5.
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