Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The assigned task is in the form of pie chart showcasing the laboring of adults in a particular nation between 1958 and 2008.
overall, working topped the chart in both time frames, although in initial year travelling to work ranked the least but with passage of time going out friends and family.
To begin with, in terms of working, in 1958 it was 33%, followed by sleeping 32%, the former figure rose to 42% and later one decreased to 25% by 2008. wheras, playing sports remained similar in both time frames. contrarily, relaxing at home was 8% in 1958 which later increaed to 13% in 2008.
Moreover, the data for going out with freinds and family was 19% which showed decrease by the later year and became 6%. Furthermore, travelling to work increased with margin of 5% in 2005
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the pie charts showing adults' time use in 1958 and 2008, presenting some key features such as working and sleeping percentages. However, there are significant omissions and inaccuracies in reporting the data. For example, the student states that travelling to work ranked the least in the initial year and then mentions going out with friends and family, which is confusingly phrased. Data points are sometimes misstated or vague, such as 'travelling to work increased with margin of 5% in 2005' (the chart is for 2008). Furthermore, the response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, as it contains only 139 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a band score of 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response exhibits some organisation with paragraph breaks and introductory transitions like 'To begin with' and 'Moreover'. However, there is a lack of clear overall progression, and some cohesive devices are misused or awkward, such as starting the second paragraph with 'overall' in lowercase. Referencing is also problematic, as seen in the phrase 'the former figure rose... and later one decreased'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of information is disjointed and lacks a fully logical flow throughout, reflecting Band 5 characteristics.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for basic communication but lacks precision and range. The student attempts some topic-related vocabulary like 'pie chart', 'time frames', and 'proportion', but relies on imprecise or unnatural phrasing such as 'showcasing the laboring of adults' and 'going out with freinds and family' (which contains a spelling error). There are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'with margin of 5%', which can cause slight difficulty for the reader. This places the response firmly in the Band 5 category for lexical resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent errors, such as missing articles ('in initial year'), incorrect prepositions ('with margin'), and faulty subordination ('wheras, playing sports remained similar...'). Run-on sentences and punctuation issues are also evident, such as 'overall, working topped the chart in both time frames, although in initial year travelling to work ranked the least but with passage of time going out friends and family.' These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader, aligning with a band score of 5.0.
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