Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This pie chart show how adults spend there time in multiple activities whole day.It represents the difference of adult working activities in 1958 and 2008.

In 1958:How's the adult's of 1958 spend their day.They used to spend their 2% like 30 to 45 minutes from thier hole day in travelling to their work,jobs bussiness nad multiple work stations.Most of the time like 9 to 10 hours of day the adult's spend in working like at their jobs bussines and furthure working places.They spend 33% time of whole day at their work.On the other hand the adults almost spend their 5 to 6 hours at sleeping or bed time.They spend their 32% of time at sleeping from their whole day.While the rest of 27% of day they love to spend 19% of thier 3 to 4 hours of day at outing with thier friends or family and spend quality time.While the remaining 8% almost 3 to 4 hours they spend at home for relaxing or self time.

But in 2008 the routine of adults in spending their whole day is totally changed.

25% of day adults spend at their bed while sleeping.Then the used to consume their 7% time or day at trvelling to their work jobs and bussiness and then spend their far time like 42% time of day at their multiple works.After that the spend 7% of their time at playing physical sports or videos games.This is the major change in adults as compare to 1958.While on the other hand adult's used to spend their 6% of time from thier whole day at outing with friends or family.The rest of 13% they used to spend at relaxing home.

The major change in adults of 1958 or 2008 is,The adults of 2008 mostly spend their day at working or sleeping.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover the main features of the two pie charts comparing working adults' time allocation in 1958 and 2008. The student successfully identifies major activities such as working, sleeping, and relaxing at home, and notes key shifts like the increase in working hours from 33% to 42% and the introduction of playing sports in 2008 (7%). However, there are significant issues with data interpretation and expression. For instance, the student states that 2% equates to '30 to 45 minutes' which is mathematically incorrect for a 24-hour day, and describes proportions inconsistently. Furthermore, some data points are misreported or confusingly intertwined with subjective commentary. While all parts of the visual data are touched upon, the lack of precision and awkward framing prevent the response from achieving a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into separate paragraphs for the introduction, the 1958 data, the 2008 data, and a brief concluding sentence, showing a basic structural arrangement. However, the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions, repetitive phrasing, and fragmented sentences (e.g., 'In 1958:How's the adult's of 1958 spend their day.'). Cohesive devices are used rather mechanically and sometimes inaccurately, such as the repeated overuse of 'While' and 'Then'. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal paragraph cohesion is weak, with sentences feeling disjointed rather than flowing logically from one point to the next. Overall arrangement is coherent enough to follow, but logical flow is noticeably strained.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student uses a basic and repetitive vocabulary range appropriate for simple everyday contexts, such as 'spend', 'time', 'day', and 'multiple work stations'. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including 'bussiness' instead of business, 'thier' instead of their, 'furthure' instead of further, and 'trvelling' instead of travelling. While the student attempts some less common terms like 'outing' and 'physical sports', these are often accompanied by awkward collocations or incorrect forms. The lexical control is limited, and spelling mistakes are frequent enough to occasionally cause strain for the reader, placing the response firmly at band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('This pie chart show', 'adult's of 1958 spend'), incorrect article usage, and punctuation errors including missing spaces after full stops (e.g., 'whole day.It represents'). Complex structures are often faulty, leading to confusion in meaning. While the reader can generally deduce the intended message, the high frequency of errors across basic and complex sentences restricts the score to a 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on the overall communicative success.

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