Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
There are showing two types of diagrams that shows us the percentage of the day spent by working adult on various activities in two different years. There is a huge difference between both years. With the passage of time people started to focus on their goals and they trying hard to become something in society. This diagram shows us that people in 1958 spent much time with family but in 2008 they preseve their time for work and make it less than 1958.first they spent 19% time with family in 1958 but in 2008 they have just 7% time for their families. In previous years people mostly work 33% but in 2008 there are so many works that they try to do for making good properties or houses for good life. They feel better when they do all day work there's an edition in new years of playing because people feel that iff health is good than they'll do something.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the main features of the two pie charts, noting shifts in time spent on working, family, and other activities. However, the student includes personal opinions and unsupported speculations, such as people trying 'to become something in society' or making 'good properties or houses,' which are not present in the data. Furthermore, some data points are misread or confused; for instance, the text states 'they preseve their time for work and make it less than 1958' while the data shows working increased from 33% to 42%. There is also a lack of a clear overall overview of the main trends. These limitations place the response at Band 5.0 according to the task achievement descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response suffers significantly from a lack of proper paragraphing, as the entire text is written as a single dense block. Cohesive devices are very basic and sometimes inaccurate or missing ('first they spent...', 'in previous years...'). The logical progression is frequently disrupted by sudden shifts from data description to personal commentary without transitional signals. While there is a discernible attempt to move from an introduction into body details, the overall organisation is mechanical and hard to follow, which aligns closely with the Band 4.5 to 5.0 level. A score of 5.0 is awarded as there is some basic arrangement of ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'time', 'people', 'work', and 'family'. There are noticeable inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'preseve' instead of 'preserve', 'edition' instead of 'addition', and awkward phrasing like 'making good properties or houses'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for conveying very basic points, but word choice errors and a lack of less common lexical items restrict the score to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences joined by basic conjunctions. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, such as 'iff health is good than they'll do something' and 'there are so many works that they try to do'. Frequent grammatical errors, missing auxiliary verbs ('There are showing two types'), and punctuation issues occur throughout the response, causing occasional difficulty for the reader. This corresponds to the Band 5 descriptors for grammatical range and accuracy.
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