Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the assigned pie charts make an attempt to campare the statistics regarding how much time allocated by young people in the year of 1958 and 2008.
In detail, working ranked first in the terms of spending time by adult,accounting for 33% in 1958 .it then underwant a sterp incline of 42% in 2008. whereas, the proportion of day spent on sleeping stood at 32% in initial year .This figure decreased gradually to 25% in last year.
Interestingly, almost similar percentage of time on relaxing at home (13%)in 1985 to 2008. Whilst, Under 10% Of time invested on outing with family and friends,plying sports and travelling for work between 1985 and 2008.
overall,the maximum percentage of time spent on working and sleeping in initial year which was overtaken by working adult with the passage of time.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the two pie charts, identifying working, sleeping, and relaxing trends. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the student states that working 'underwant a sterp incline of 42% in 2008' (it rose from 33% to 42%), and misinterprets the years ('1985' instead of 1958). Furthermore, the response falls short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 135 words. This under-length impacts the overall fullness of the response, leading to a Band 5.0 score for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response has a basic organisational structure with paragraphs, attempting to use cohesive devices such as 'In detail', 'whereas', and 'Interestingly'. However, referencing and transitions are at times awkward or mechanical. The paragraphing is rudimentary, and the logical progression is occasionally disrupted by confusing phrasing and chronological inaccuracies, such as referencing '1985' instead of the given years. These issues place the response firmly in the Band 5 category for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary with noticeable errors in word choice and spelling. Examples include 'campare' instead of compare, 'underwant' instead of underwent, 'sterp' instead of steep, and 'plying' instead of playing. While terms like 'proportion', 'percentage', and 'incline' are attempted, frequent spelling mistakes and awkward collocations such as 'spending time by adult' and 'travelling for work' restrict the lexical score to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The text contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but grammatical accuracy is weak. There are frequent errors in tense usage, prepositions, and verb forms, such as 'how much time allocated by young people' (missing auxiliary/verb), 'ranked first in the terms of spending time', and sentence fragments like 'it then underwant a sterp incline of 42% in 2008.' Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic throughout. These persistent errors justify a Band 5.0 score for grammatical range and accuracy.
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