Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart illustrates how people spend their time in different daily activities as copare to 1958 to 2008.
Overall people spend much time on working iand travelling in 2008 as compare to 1958.
In contrast, they spend less time in sleeping and going out with family and friend in 2008.
Looking at the increase,The travelling in working percentage is grew in 1958 its only 2% but now its rise and upto 7% in 2008. Working percentage is also increase in 2008 its about 42% now and 33% in 1958.And the relaxing at home is also instanly increase in 1958 its 8% and in 2008 its 13%. There is also add a new activity in today's generation sports its about 7% in adults nowdays
Looking at the descrease,In 1958 going outside with family and friends percentage is 19% and in 2008 its only 6%.And the very important and injerious for health acitivity that kills people mindset now adays is decrease thats sleeping scedule in 1958 32% is shown in graph but in 2008 its only 25%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all key parts of the task by reporting the main features of the charts and making relevant comparisons between 1958 and 2008, such as the increase in working and traveling and the decrease in sleeping. An overview is present at the beginning, summarizing main trends. However, the data points are occasionally inaccurate or confusingly stated, such as 'The travelling in working percentage is grew', and the unsupported personal commentary at the end regarding health ('injerious for health acitivity that kills people mindset') detracts from the academic tone and objectivity required for Task 1. Therefore, it achieves a band score of 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is organized with an introductory sentence, body paragraphs grouped by increases and decreases, and an overall attempt at paragraphing. However, cohesion is frequently faulty or mechanical. The transitions between points are abrupt, and the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'In contrast, they spend less time in sleeping and going out with family and friend in 2008.' The heading-like structures ('Looking at the increase,' and 'Looking at the descrease,') are overly conversational and demonstrate a lack of sophisticated cohesive devices. Paragraphing is also somewhat disjointed due to run-on thoughts. These factors place this criterion at a band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors and spelling mistakes (e.g., 'copare', 'iand', 'instanly', 'descrease', 'scedule', 'injerious'). While the student attempts some less common vocabulary related to the prompt, inaccuracies in collocation and form impede clarity in places, such as 'travelling in working percentage' or 'kills people mindset'. The range is adequate to convey simple comparisons but lacks the precision required for higher bands, resulting in a band score of 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences contain frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and sentence construction. There are numerous run-on sentences and fragmented ideas, such as 'Working percentage is also increase in 2008 its about 42% now and 33% in 1958.And the relaxing at home is also instanly increase...' Subject-verb agreement and tense consistency are poorly controlled throughout the text (e.g., 'percentage is grew', 'its only 2% but now its rise'). These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and reflect a band score of 4.5.
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