Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie charts illustrate how adults in a particular country spent their time on various activities from 1958 to 2008.

Overview,the data shows that working of adults has rise with high numbers of percentages while,sleeping times and going out with friends or family of adults are decresed over the period.

On the one hand,in 1958 working has 33% wherever it increase in 2008 with 9% and become 42% also the highest percentages of chart .Going out with friends or family and sleeping has decline and remaining 6% and 32% however playing sports still remain same of 7%.

On the other hand,in 1958 travelling to work has 2% while it growth in 2008 with 5% .Relaxing at home has also rises over the decade of periods with 13% however everything rised stedily over the periods.In 1958 sports percentages has not showed but in 2008 its show the rate of playing sports.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to cover the main features of the pie charts, identifying overall trends such as the increase in working hours and the decline in sleeping time. However, the response contains numerous factual inaccuracies regarding the data. For instance, the text states that going out with friends or family and sleeping 'has decline and remaining 6% and 32%', whereas the data shows sleeping dropped to 25% in 2008 and family/friends dropped to 6%, while 32% was the 1958 sleeping figure. Furthermore, stating that 'in 1958 sports percentages has not showed' is incorrect, as the 1958 chart simply did not include sports (it was added in 2008). Due to these significant data misinterpretations and lack of clear overview synthesis, the response falls into Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response attempts a conventional structure with an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs separated logically ('On the one hand', 'On the other hand'). However, the progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow due to poor punctuation, run-on sentences, and mechanical or misused cohesive devices (e.g., 'wherever it increase'). Paragraphing is attempted, but overall cohesion is faulty and referencing is frequently unclear, making the relationship between ideas strained. This level of organisation aligns with the Band 5 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive ('has rise', 'decresed', 'growth', 'rises', 'rised'). There are severe lexical and word-formation errors throughout the response, such as 'high numbers of percentages' and 'working of adults has rise'. Spelling errors and incorrect word choices (e.g., 'wherever' instead of 'whereas', 'its show' instead of 'it shows') frequently impede communication and restrict the lexical range to a minimally adequate level, fitting Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response shows a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most complex structure attempts contain severe errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and clause connection (e.g., 'working has 33% wherever it increase in 2008 with 9% and become 42%'). Punctuation is largely neglected, with missing spaces and run-on sentences causing frequent comprehension difficulties for the reader. These persistent, dense grammatical errors place the response firmly in Band 4 for grammar.

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