Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

pie chart clearly illustrate that working adults in several countries love to spend their time as own preference.

Adults in 1958 used to spend most of time on working and sleeping were second choice after relaxed body they used to spend time with friends and family on outing.well after it relaxing at home was necessary for them and the less was travelling to work.

By comparing the data 1958 and 2008 preference toward worked has increased as we see in 1958 working was only 33% and today it has increased on 42% sleeping was 32 as today it moved down 25% on going out with family or friends was 19% and has decreased on 6% relaxing at home was 8% know it jumped on 13% travelling to work was onlt 2% and know it reached on 7% by adding extra activity was not a part of 1958 that is playing sports which is 7%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to summarise the data by identifying several key changes between 1958 and 2008, such as the increase in working hours and the introduction of playing sports. However, the response contains several inaccuracies in data reporting (e.g., stating sleeping went from 32 down to 25 when it was 32% and 25%, but misinterpreting other proportions), and the overall structure lacks a clear, well-developed overview. The information is somewhat disjointed and focuses heavily on listing raw percentages without fully integrating comparisons. This corresponds to Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response suffers from severe paragraphing issues, being written almost entirely as a single block of text or in poorly demarcated chunks that lack standard essay structure. There is a lack of cohesive devices, with sentences strung together using informal spoken connectors like 'well after it' or run-on structures without punctuation. Progression is difficult to follow because of these structural shortcomings and poor referencing. This warrants a Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying on terms like 'spend their time', 'working', and 'relaxing'. There are numerous word choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'preference toward worked has increased', 'know it jumped on 13%', and 'onlgt 2%'. These lexical limitations and spelling/form errors occasionally impede smooth reading. This fits the Band 4.0 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text consists largely of run-on sentences, comma splices, and fragment-like structures lacking proper subordination and punctuation (e.g., 'Adults in 1958 used to spend most of time on working and sleeping were second choice after relaxed body...'). Errors are very frequent, distorting meaning in several places and placing a heavy burden on the reader. This aligns with Band 4.0.

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