Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
With the help of these pie charts, we summarise that how working adults spent their time in 1958 and 2008
In 1958, adults contributed their 33% of time at working in whole year. They spent their 19% of time with family and friends. The adults of 1958 did not interested to travelling to work, they spent only 2% of time to travelling to work. These adults relaxed at home only 8% of time. They spent 32% of time at sleeping.
According to 2008 chart, these adults contributed 42% of time at working and it is a big change. These adults spent 6% of time going out with friends and family.They spent 7% of time in playing sports. They spent 7% of time to travelling to work. They also spent 25% of time at sleeping. They only contributed the 13% of time in relaxing at home.
In conclusin, we summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and made camparisons between 1958 and 2008 adults time spending movements.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the two pie charts, correctly identifying key statistics such as the proportion of time spent working (33% in 1958 and 42% in 2008) and sleeping (32% and 25% respectively). Comparisons are made between the two years, fulfilling the core requirements of Task 1. However, the overview is weak, and the concluding paragraph is repetitive and ineffective, merely echoing the prompt rather than synthesizing overarching trends. While the figures reported are accurate, the overall development of ideas remains slightly basic, placing this response comfortably at Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The text is structured into four paragraphs, including an introduction, two body paragraphs for each respective year, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and a mechanical approach to transitioning between sentences (e.g., beginning multiple sentences with 'They spent'). Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes awkward, such as the introductory phrase 'With the help of these pie charts, we summarise that how...'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the overall cohesion feels disjointed, resulting in a Band 5.5 score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, successfully conveying basic percentages and everyday activities like working, sleeping, and relaxing. However, there are notable lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'did not interested to travelling' and 'adults time spending movements'. Attempts to use higher-level vocabulary are limited and frequently inaccurate. While communication is not severely impeded, the narrow range and frequent lexical slips prevent the response from achieving a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, though complex structures are often flawed. There are several grammatical inaccuracies throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement errors ('we summarise that how working adults spent...'), preposition misuses ('time at working', 'interested to travelling'), and awkward phrasing ('adults contributed their 33% of time at working in whole year'). Punctuation in the conclusion is also problematic, with spelling errors like 'conclusin' and 'camparisons'. These frequent errors place the grammar score at Band 5.0.
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