Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In the 1958 percentage is less than 2008. different various activities involve like going out with friends/family 19% yet in 2008 going out with friends/family 6% the another level or sleeping 32% in 2008 sleeping 20% its two different various included according to percentage over activities yet travelling to work 2% in 2008 travelling to work 7% to show the difference between 1958 to 2008. Reveal the production process in different ways changes working 33% to working 42% . alot of increasing working percentage value relaxing at time to different 8% or 13%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is severely under-length, containing only 93 words against the required 150-word minimum, which significantly impacts task completion. While the student attempts to report some data points from the charts (such as 'going out with friends/family 19%' in 1958 versus '6%' in 2008, and 'sleeping 32%' and 'working 33%'), the selection of features is disjointed and fails to provide a comprehensive overview of the main trends. Furthermore, several figures are misstated or awkwardly phrased, such as claiming 'sleeping 20%' in 2008 when the data shows 25%. Due to the under-length penalty and lack of an adequate overview and fully developed comparison, this falls into the lower band range.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response consists of a single, continuous block of text without proper paragraphing, which makes the progression of ideas difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, relying on repetitive phrases like 'in 2008' and awkward transitional chunks such as 'its two different various included according to percentage over activities yet'. There is no clear logical organisation or structure typical of an IELTS Academic Task 1 report, resulting in a fragmented piece of writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The lexical range is extremely limited and repetitive, with words like 'different', 'various', 'percentage', and 'activities' recycled constantly. There are severe word choice and collocation errors throughout the text, such as 'percentage is less than 2008', 'relaxing at time', and 'alot of increasing working percentage value'. Vocabulary is basic and non-functional for precise data reporting, occasionally causing confusion for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The writing lacks control over sentence structure, consisting mostly of fragmented clauses and run-on sequences linked incorrectly without punctuation. There is a complete absence of accurate complex sentence forms. Numerous grammatical errors are present, including missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and faulty subject-verb agreements, such as 'different various activities involve like' and 'Reveal the production process in different ways changes working'. These frequent errors frequently impede communication.
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