Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie charts illustrates the data shows compression that how adult use to spent their time in 1958 and 2008 of a particular country.
After anylsing the data of working adults activities are separated in five sector.we can see that their are not any changes on activities of adults.working and sleeping is dominant between all of these activities.There is a specific rise in working and falls on sleeping in past and present .The activities of going out with friends/family have cause a falls in2008.Relaxing at home have rise between adults and praying sport and travel to work have also rise till 2008.
In conclusion the work load has been rise alot till 2008 as compare to 1958 so they cannot have got time to take nape aa much as they can have in past . The falls of going out friends/family have cause fall due working load and start to relax at their own house
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the pie charts comparing 1958 and 2008, noting that working and sleeping were the dominant activities and identifying increases in working, relaxing at home, traveling to work, and playing sports, alongside a decrease in going out with friends/family. However, the report lacks precise use of data (no figures or percentages are cited to support the claims) and contains vague over-generalizations. Furthermore, the overview is poorly integrated. These limitations place the response at Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay is divided into three short paragraphs, but the overall organization and logical progression are weak. The introduction is extremely fragmented and confusing ('The pie charts illustrates the data shows compression that how adult...'). Cohesive devices are either missing or used inaccurately, and referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the relationships between ideas. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion fails to create a smooth progression.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The lexical range is very limited and basic, with frequent vocabulary errors and inappropriate word choices such as 'compression' instead of 'comparison', 'anylsing' instead of 'analyzing', and 'praying sport' instead of 'playing sports'. There is also poor collocation throughout the text (e.g., 'work load has been rise alot'). These noticeable lexical errors and spelling mistakes cause frequent difficulty for the reader and impede clear communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex or descriptive sentences are consistently faulty. There are severe issues with tense consistency, subject-verb agreement, and basic clause structures, such as in 'how adult use to spent their time' and 'the work load has been rise alot till 2008 as compare to 1958 so they cannot have got time'. Punctuation and word forms are inaccurate throughout, leading to frequent errors that distort meaning.
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