Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The piechart show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008 .
Percentages of the day spent by working adults on various activities in 1958. Nineteen percent adults going out with friends and family .Two percent adults travelling to work daily .Thirty two percent adults percentage of the day spent by working on sleeping .Eight percent adults relaxing at home. And 33 percent adults go for working daily .
Now I talk about the percentages of the day spent by adults on various activities in 2008 . Seven percent adults playing a sports like cricket ,football etc.Six pecent adults going with friends and family.Seven percent travelling to work. Twenty five percent adults sleeping .And thirteen percent adults Relaxing at home in 2008 . Last forty two percent adults go for the working in 2008.
Comparision between 1958 and 2008 pecentages of activities . In 2008 travelling and working by adults increase .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the two pie charts showing how working adults spent their time in 1958 and 2008. The student successfully identifies several data points, such as working hours (33% in 1958 to 42% in 2008) and sleeping time (32% to 25%). However, the overview is extremely weak and lacks a proper summary of the overall trends until a brief concluding sentence. Furthermore, some data points are slightly garbled in expression, and the response fails to fully integrate comprehensive comparisons throughout the body paragraphs. It achieves the minimum length requirement, but the organization and depth of data reporting remain basic, fitting Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression and overall coherence are heavily disrupted by poor sentence structure and disjointed formatting. The introduction is a single sentence, followed by fragmented bullet-like descriptions in paragraphs two and three. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with repetitive phrasings such as 'adults adults' and awkward transitions like 'Now I talk about' and 'Last forty two percent'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal flow of ideas lacks clear progression, resulting in a score of 4.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily relies on lifting words directly from the prompt. Frequent word-choice and collocation errors appear, such as 'go for working daily' instead of 'working' or 'at work', 'playing a sports like cricket', and 'travelling and working by adults increase'. Spelling and morphological issues are also present, such as 'pecent' and 'Comparision'. The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for conveying basic numbers, but frequent inaccuracies restrict the score to Band 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting almost entirely of simple, repetitive fragments or heavily flawed independent clauses. There is a complete lack of accurate complex sentences. Frequent basic grammatical errors occur, including missing verbs ('The piechart show'), incorrect prepositional usage, and awkward word order ('Nineteen percent adults going out'). Punctuation is also flawed, with erratic spacing around periods. These persistent errors cause frequent strain for the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0.
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