Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chart illustrates the comparison between 1958 and 2008 of a country. In which the pie chart depicts the information of working adults in two years. Overall, two charts are displayed. One gives the detail of year 1958 and other one gives 2008. The pie chart divides into six parts and each part provide different information of working young generation.

Having a closer look on the chart of 1958, Itis crystal clear that 33% portion of the chart covers by working class that is a bit lower than detail in 2008. which is 42% of the chart. Although, second major part covered by sleeping young generations. In 1958 32% of adults waste their time for sleeping which reduce to 25% in 2008.

Turning to the smaller segments, It can be seen that In 1958 19% young individuals going out with family and friends. Whereas, This ratio decrease to only 6% in 2008. However, 8% people relaxe at home in 1958 which raise to 13% in 2008. Same as only 2% people travelling to work in 1958 which surge to 7% in 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The student attempts to cover the main features of the pie charts comparing 1958 and 2008, correctly identifying changes in working hours, sleeping, and leisure activities. However, the response contains several inaccuracies and awkward phrasing regarding the data. For instance, the student refers to adults as 'young generations' and states that people 'waste their time for sleeping', which misinterprets the nature of the data. Furthermore, playing sports (7% in 2008) is completely omitted from the overview and body paragraphs. The overview is weak and repetitive, failing to provide a clear, concise summary of the overall trends. While some key comparisons are made, the lack of thoroughness and minor data omissions place this performance in the Band 5.5 to 6.0 range, warranting a 5.5 due to under-developed overview and missing data points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into multiple paragraphs, attempting an introduction and body paragraphs. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by poor cohesion and repetitive phrasing. The introductory paragraph is disjointed, stating 'In which the pie chart depicts...' which is grammatically incomplete and confusing. Cohesive devices are either misused or mechanical (e.g., 'Having a closer look on...', 'Same as only 2% people...'). Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within sentences is often faulty, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information smoothly. These coherence issues align with a Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The lexical range is limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic vocabulary and direct repetition of terms from the prompt (e.g., 'pie chart', 'working adults', '1958', '2008'). There are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'waste their time for sleeping', 'people relaxe at home' (spelling error), and referring to working adults as 'working young generation'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with inaccuracy. Although the intended meaning is usually clear despite the errors, the constraints in range and frequent lexical inaccuracies restrict the score to a Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures. The student attempts some complex sentences, but these are frequently faulty (e.g., sentence fragments like 'In which the pie chart depicts the information...' and 'Itis crystal clear that 33% portion of the chart covers by working class...'). Passive voice formation is incorrect ('covers by' instead of 'is covered by'), and subject-verb agreement issues are present ('ratio decrease', 'people relaxe', 'people travelling'). Punctuation and capitalization errors also occur (e.g., 'Itis'). Because errors are frequent and recurrent across simple and complex structures, the appropriate band score is 5.0.

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