Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given pie chart illustrates comparative analysis of time invested by employed adults on several activities in a specific country in 1958 and after half a century. Overall, working was ranked first in both years, with travelling to work and going out with friends/ family ranked lowest in both timelines, respectively.
To commence with, the highest percentage among the individuals remained working with 33% in 1958 and around a half of the total in 2008, followed by their time consumed in sleeping of about nearly a third and almost a quarter in both years, respectively. Futhermore, going out with friends/family was favourable at about 19% in the 1958, but ultimately dropped to the bottom with a tiny fraction with greater emphasize on relaxing at home in 2008, with having a share of 13%.
Moreover, the least chosen 5 decades ago, travelling to work, improved its ranking, and became equally popular as playing sports, with 7%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The student successfully addresses all parts of the prompt by summarising the main features of the two pie charts and making relevant comparisons between 1958 and 2008. An appropriate overview is provided in the second sentence, noting that working remained the primary activity while travelling to work and socialising saw changes. Key data points are reported accurately, such as working increasing from 33% to 42% and sleeping decreasing from 32% to 25%. However, there are minor inaccuracies in data interpretation, such as stating working accounted for 'around a half of the total in 2008' when it was actually 42%, and minor confusion over rankings, but overall the core requirements of Task 1 are met effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response has a clear overall progression and is divided into logical paragraphs. Cohesive devices are employed to connect ideas, such as 'To commence with', 'Furthermore', and 'Moreover'. However, some of the cohesive choices and referencing are slightly mechanical or awkward, such as 'with having a share of 13%' and 'respectively' used incorrectly when only one item or timeline is compared. Paragraphing is adequate, but transitions between sentences can feel slightly disjointed. Overall, the organisation supports the flow of information adequately.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common items such as 'comparative analysis', 'favourable', and 'proportion' synonyms like 'share' and 'fraction'. However, there are several lexical errors and awkward collocations throughout the text, including 'time invested by employed adults' instead of 'spent', 'remain working', and 'greater emphasize' (spelling/form error). Word choice errors like 'the least chosen 5 decades ago' slightly reduce precision, but communication is not impeded.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some control over structure with clauses like 'while travelling to work and going out with friends/ family ranked lowest'. However, there are notable grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'the highest percentage among the individuals remained working with 33%' and 'with having a share of 13%', which feature clumsy prepositional use. Punctuation is generally acceptable, and while errors are present, they rarely impede overall communication.
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