Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of how percentages days spenting by adults on various activities in 1958 and 2008.
Overall the data showa the information the young individuals working in the mother country spent their time in between Ninetheen Centuary. Mostly young generation spent a good time in working which percentage is 33% it is the higgest percentge whereby adults doing various activities in the 1958.
They dont spenting their rose time in the traveling to work its rates is only 2%. Lowest the activity do by their adults and 8% rate is in take rest in the home and 19% in enjoying and going out with buddys and life partners mostly preffered to shopping which percentages rate is 32%.
In 2008 mostly adults added a relaxing activities a spent good time in sports whereby rate is 7% and working rate is stradily increased from 33% to 42%. Relaxing at home from 8% above to 13% also inceased in sleeping and in relaxing.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to address the task by comparing the two pie charts showing how working adults spent their time in 1958 and 2008. However, there are significant issues with task completion and data interpretation. For instance, the student states that working was 33% and sleeping was 32% in 1958, but misinterprets other figures or invents details, such as claiming people 'preffered to shopping which percentages rate is 32%' (shopping is not featured in the charts). Furthermore, the overview is confused and lacks clarity. While the main features are touched upon, the lack of accurate reporting and inclusion of extraneous information pull the score down into the lower bands.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text is divided into four paragraphs, which shows some basic awareness of structure for an Academic Task 1 response. However, the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by broken syntax and confusing phrasing. Cohesive devices are used very poorly or mechanically, resulting in disjointed sentences where referencing is frequently unclear (e.g., 'They dont spenting their rose time in the traveling to work...'). There is no logical flow connecting the sentences, and the overall arrangement fails to provide a clear, easy-to-follow summary of the visual data.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary range is very limited and heavily restricted by frequent word-formation and spelling errors. The student relies on basic, repetitive terms and attempts to use less common vocabulary usually result in incorrect word choices and unidiomatic collocations, such as 'rose time', 'buddys', and 'life partners'. Spelling mistakes are prevalent throughout the text (e.g., 'spenting', 'showa', 'higgest', 'preffered'). These errors severely strain the reader and impede clear communication of the data points.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The text contains a very limited range of structures, and almost every sentence features severe grammatical errors, incorrect verb forms, tense inconsistencies, and faulty syntax (e.g., 'the young individuals working in the mother country spent their time in between Ninetheen Centuary' and 'working rate is stradily increased'). There are virtually no error-free sentences, and the frequent structural failures make comprehension very difficult for the reader.
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