Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart shows the percentage of working adults from year 1958 to 2008.

Chart shows in 1958 the activities is different from 2008.And it is also seen that in 2008 activities has been increased.

In 1958 it is seen that sleeping is the one with the highest percentage which is 32% and working is of 33% and going out with friends and family is 19% and travelling to work is 19%.

In 2008 as compared to 1958 the percentage of working is increased and it is 42% and it is the one with the highest percentage in 2008.Percentage of sleeping is 25% and relaxing at home is 13% which is also increased as compared to 1958 going out with friends and family is 6% which is decreased in comparison to year 1958 and travelling to work is 7% and it is increased a new activity that is not in year 1958 is playing sports and in 2008 it is 7%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to report the main features of the two pie charts comparing time spent by working adults in 1958 and 2008. However, there are several factual errors in the data reporting. For instance, the student states that travelling to work in 1958 was 19% (when it was actually 2%) and misinterprets the overall trend in some categories. Furthermore, the overview attempted in the second sentence is extremely vague ('in 2008 activities has been increased'). While some key data points are mentioned, such as working being 42% in 2008 and the introduction of playing sports, the inaccurate data transcription and lack of a clear, accurate overview restrict the task response to Band 4.5, which rounds to Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response suffers from severe issues with paragraphing and cohesion. The entire body of the text, except for the introductory sentence, is lumped into a massive run-on paragraph consisting of poorly linked clauses. Cohesive devices are extremely basic and repetitive, heavily relying on 'and' and 'in 1958 it is seen that'. There is no clear overall progression or logical sequencing between ideas, and the lack of proper punctuation makes the text difficult to follow. These organizational and cohesive shortcomings align well with the Band 4 descriptors.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive throughout the response. Phrases like 'percentage of working', 'highest percentage', and 'activities has been increased' are repeated multiple times. There is a lack of flexibility and precision, and the student makes lexical misstatements, such as saying 'activities has been increased'. Less common vocabulary is entirely absent, and word choice is often simplistic or awkward. This performance meets the criteria for Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is severely limited, consisting mostly of repetitive simple sentences joined by coordinating conjunctions like 'and' or weak introductory phrases like 'it is seen that'. There is a complete lack of control over complex sentence structures and punctuation, resulting in run-on sentences with missing full stops and commas (e.g., '1958.And it is also seen'). Grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('activities has been increased'), are frequent and impede readability. This demonstrates Band 4 grammar control.

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