Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts compare the rate of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, adults spend the majority of their time each day working. While personal and social activities tend to decline beyond 50 years.

In 1958, the predominant time-consuming activity for adults was work, accounting for 33% of their day. This percentage surged to 42% in 2008, indicates the substanial rise in the rate of time adults spent on work over a period of 20 years from 1958 to 2008. Concurrently, the time allocated to pursuing interests or engaging in sports experienced a modest increase from 6% to 8% between the two years. Moreover, time spent on travel to work saw a substantial rise, which quadrupled from 2% in 1958 to 8% in 2008. Similarly, the relaxing at home rose from 8% in 1958 to 13% in 2008.

Coversely, the time spent on sleeping saw a minor decrease from 32% in 1958 to 25% in 2008. Furthermore, the time spent on socializing or spending time with friends and family notably declined from 19% in 1958 to merely 6% in 2008.

in conclusion, the analysis reveals a significant transformation in the time distribution of working adults, with a notable inclination towards work-related engagements at the expense of personal and social endeavors.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features of both pie charts and making relevant comparisons between 1958 and 2008. The candidate correctly identifies key trends, such as the increase in working hours and travel to work, alongside the decrease in sleeping and socializing. However, there are a few data inaccuracies: the student states that the time spent on sports increased from 6% to 8%, whereas the chart indicates 7% in 2008 and no sports category listed in 1958 (or rather, playing sports was 7% in 2008, and the 1958 chart had no sports category). Additionally, travel to work in 2008 is stated as 8% (the chart shows 7%), and relaxing at home in 1958 is stated as 8% (chart shows 8%? Wait, 1958 relaxing at home is 8%, 2008 is 13%). Despite these minor data slips, the overall overview is clear and the task is adequately addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The text is logically organized into an introduction, clear body paragraphs covering contrasting trends, and a concluding summary. Cohesive devices such as 'While', 'Concurrently', and 'Conversely' are used to connect ideas between and within paragraphs. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate growing activities from declining ones. However, referencing and transitions are occasionally mechanical, and the second sentence of the introduction ('While personal and social activities tend to decline beyond 50 years') is a confusing fragment or misinterpretation of the timeline (referring to 50 years instead of a 50-year span). Overall progression is generally clear, supporting a band 6.5 or 7.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The student demonstrates a sufficient range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common lexical items such as 'predominant', 'substanial' (spelling error for substantial), 'concurrently', and 'transformation'. There are some word choice and collocation issues, such as 'rate of time' instead of 'proportion of time', and a few spelling slips (e.g., 'substanial', 'Coversely' instead of 'Conversely', 'in conclusion' capitalized incorrectly). Nevertheless, the vocabulary is adequate to convey the intended meaning without impeding the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The writing exhibits a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, including relative clauses and participial phrases (e.g., 'accounting for 33% of their day', 'indicates the substanial rise'). There are several grammatical errors and awkward constructions, such as 'indicates the substanial rise' (missing subject or incorrect participle agreement) and the fragmented second sentence in the introduction. Punctuation and capitalization errors also appear (e.g., 'in conclusion' starting a sentence with a lowercase letter). Despite these errors, communication is rarely impeded.

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