Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The supplied pie charts compare proportion related adults who working in particular state and spent their time in other activities between 1958 and 2008.
Overall, in 1958 working adults spent most of their time in working also the same portion spent for sleeping While, travelling use very small portion and friends use few portion. Furthermore, in 2008, adults spent their almost halfh time in working and sleeping time reduce than 1958, also relaxing time escalated than previous.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to compare the pie charts from 1958 and 2008 by mentioning working and sleeping hours. However, the text is severely underdeveloped and falls well short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 77 words. Furthermore, several key data points are inaccurate or poorly communicated, such as stating that sleeping time in 1958 was 'the same portion' as working (33% vs 32%), and omitting several major categories like sports. Because the length requirement is not met and the coverage of main features is extremely limited, the task achievement is significantly restricted.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text attempts a basic overview with 'Overall' and tries to link sentences using cohesive devices such as 'While' and 'Furthermore'. However, the logical progression is hindered by poor grammar and fragmented sentence structures. Paragraphing is also rudimentary, as the entire response is compressed into just two very short paragraphs. Referencing between ideas is often unclear, resulting in a somewhat disjointed reading experience that fails to effectively guide the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily relying on simple terms like 'spent', 'time', 'working', and 'sleeping'. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'proportion related adults who working', 'travelling use very small portion', and 'almost halfh time'. The limited range is only minimally adequate to convey basic concepts, and word choice inaccuracies frequently obstruct clear communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical structures attempted are very limited and plagued by frequent, severe errors. Examples include basic structural failures like 'adults who working', 'sleeping time reduce than 1958', and 'relaxing time escalated than previous'. There is a complete lack of accurate complex sentence forms, and missing or misused auxiliary verbs and prepositions cause significant difficulty for the reader throughout the short response.
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