Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart illustrates the number of adults working in particular country in 1958 and 2008. An increase propotion is recorded in the number of working adults from 33 % in 1958 to 42% in 2008.overall the figure of working adults is considered as the significant development in the mentioned time.
However spend time to relax at home has been increased to 13% in 2008. while the propotion of sleeping has been noticed a gradual decrease from 1958 then in 2008. Although it is noticed that the propotion of travel to work has been increased upto 7% then 2% in the given year. Mean while it is clearly noticed that working adults has spend more time in sports activities in 2008 than 1958.
furthermore it is noticeably seen that working adults has spend less time with their friends and family as the figure is decrease to 6% then 19%in the past.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by reporting figures from the pie charts for 1958 and 2008. However, there are significant misinterpretations of the data, such as stating that the charts illustrate 'the number of adults working' rather than percentages of the day spent on activities. Furthermore, some data points are misreported or vague, such as missing the specific figure for sleeping in 2008 and introducing errors in comparative figures. While an overview is attempted, it is awkwardly phrased and lacks precision. According to the band descriptors, this performance aligns with a Band 5 as it addresses the task only partially and contains inaccuracies in reporting key features.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organized into multiple paragraphs, but the logical progression is frequently disrupted by poor cohesion and mechanical transitions. Phrases like 'However spend time to relax' and 'Mean while' are used inaccurately. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and punctuation or capitalization issues (such as starting sentences with lowercase letters like 'overall') detract from the overall flow. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak. This demonstrates characteristics of a Band 5, where there is some organization but cohesion is inadequate and repetitive.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms like 'increase', 'decrease', and 'propotion' (misspelled). There are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'propotion', 'upto', and awkward phrasing like 'spend time to relax'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The student attempts some less common phrases, but these are marred by inaccuracies and non-standard collocations. This reflects the criteria for Band 5, where noticeable errors may cause some difficulty for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response contains a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex sentences frequently result in serious errors. Examples include 'spend time to relax at home has been increased' and 'working adults has spend less time'. Subject-verb agreement errors, tense inconsistencies, and preposition misuse are frequent throughout the text (e.g., 'decrease to 6% then 19%in the past'). These errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader. Therefore, this warrants a Band 4.5, which rounds to 5.0 according to standard reporting, or a solid Band 5 given the persistent grammatical breakdown.
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