Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart below shows how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.In the year 1958 their where only 19% of the people going out with friends and family and the 2% of the population where travelling to work and 32% of the people where sleeping and other 8% of the people were relaxing at home and also there were 33% of the people working in the year 1958
g9999
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response is severely under-length, containing only 76 words compared to the required 150-word minimum. This significantly limits the student's ability to cover all parts of the task or make comprehensive comparisons between the two years. While the student does mention a few figures from the 1958 chart, such as 33% working and 32% sleeping, there is no mention of the 2008 chart at all, and no overview is provided. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a low band score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The writing consists of a single, extremely long, run-on sentence that uses repetitive and monotonous connectors like 'and' and 'also'. There is a complete lack of paragraphing and proper punctuation throughout the text. While the data points are listed, the lack of appropriate cohesive devices and structural divisions makes the progression of ideas clumsy and difficult to follow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple verbs and functional words ('people', 'going out', 'working', 'sleeping', 'relaxing'). There is no attempt to use less common lexical items or paraphrase the prompt effectively. However, the basic words used are mostly spelled correctly, and the meaning of individual clauses remains understandable despite the lack of sophisticated terminology.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting of a single, continuous compound sentence joined excessively by coordinating conjunctions. There is a noticeable grammatical error with 'their where only 19%', where 'there were' is misused. Punctuation is entirely absent at the end of clauses, contributing to poor sentence boundaries. The lack of structural variety and the presence of basic structural errors keep the score low.
See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.