Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given pie charts show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Overall, the chats display the percentages of the day spent by working adults on various activities. The pie charts shows the percentage rate with different colors.
In 1958, mostly adults spent their time in sleeping. The chart shows that 32% of the adults sleeps at home and do nothing.19% of the young generation spent time by going out with their friends and family. Moreover, 8% of the adults in that country spent their whole time in relaxing at home. At last, only 2% adults of that country use their time in travelling to work.
Where as in 2008, there is noteable increase of doing activities by young generation.They had start playing sports and start working. They had become more responsible.The proportion of working was increased to 42% in that country by adults. They spent 7% of their time in travelling to work and 7% of the adults had start playing sports.
Meanwhile, there are still some people who waste their time in sleeping and relaxing at home. The proportion of sleeping had decreased to 25% and of relaxing at home had seen to increased to 13%.
In conclusion, both of the charts show the proportion of time spent by adults in numerous activities. There's just a slight change in both charts of percentage rates. Somewhere it had decreased and somewhere it has increased.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student covers most of the key features from the two pie charts, reporting data for both 1958 and 2008 such as working hours, sleeping, and relaxing at home. However, there are some inaccuracies and misinterpretations in the description. For instance, the student states that '32% of the adults sleeps at home and do nothing' in 1958, confusing sleeping with doing nothing. Furthermore, the commentary introduces subjective and unsupported assumptions, such as 'They had become more responsible' and 'some people who waste their time in sleeping'. An overview is attempted in the conclusion, but the lack of precise summarisation and the inclusion of informal, biased commentary pull the task response down to a Band 5.5 level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs for each year, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and weak cohesive devices. For instance, transitional phrases like 'Where as' (which is also misspelled) and 'At last' are used awkwardly. Cohesion within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, and referencing is occasionally unclear, such as shifting abruptly between talking about adults and 'young generation' without clear justification from the data. Paragraphing is present, but overall structural flow requires improvement, aligning with Band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary to describe general trends, using words like 'proportion', 'increase', and 'decreased'. However, there are noticeable lexical errors and inappropriate word choices, such as 'noteable increase', 'chats' instead of charts, and informal phrases like 'waste their time'. Word formation errors also occur, such as 'They had start playing sports' instead of 'started'. The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which is characteristic of a Band 5.0 performance.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in verb tenses and forms, such as 'mostly adults spent their time in sleeping', 'adults sleeps', and 'had start playing sports'. Punctuation errors are also present, including missing spaces after full stops (e.g., 'and do nothing.19%'). While meaning is generally understandable despite these errors, the high frequency of grammatical inaccuracies keeps the performance within the Band 5.0 range.
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