Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
THE PIE CHARTS ILLUSTRATES HOW WORKING ELDER IN A SPECIFIC NATION SPENT THEIR TIME FROM 1958 BETWEEN 2008.THE PERCENTAGE PF THE DAY SPENT BY WORKING ADULTS ON 6 DIFFERENT ACTIVITIES .
OVERALL, IN 1958 SLEEPING SIGNIFICANTLY INCREASED STOOD AT 32%, TRAVELLING TO WORK DECREASE REPRESENTED 2%, WHILE 2008 WORKING HOURS ROSE MADE UP 42%, WHILE PLAYING SPORTS ACTIVITIES REPRESENTED 75.
IN 1958, THE PERCENTAGE OF TEH DAY SPENT BY WORKING REPRESENTED 33% , WHEREAS RELAXING AT HOME MADE UP 8%. THE SLEEPING ACTIVITIES FORMED 32%. THE TRAVELLING TO WORK REPRESENTED 2%. THE GOING OUT WITH FRIENDS AND FAMILY MADE UP 19%.
IN 2008, THE WORKING ACTIVITIES SIGNIFICANTLY INCREASED REPRESENTED 42% . RELAXING AT HOME ALSO ROSE MADE UP 13PERCENT , WHEREAS SLEEPING ACTIVITIES DECREASE REPRESENTED ABOUT 25% . TRAVELLING TO WORK ALSO INCREASED REPRESENTED 7% . GOING OUT WITH FRIENDS FELL MADE 6% . THE PLAYING SPORTS PLAY A SIGNIFICANTLY AND INCREASED 7%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover both years (1958 and 2008) and reports most of the main features shown in the pie charts, such as the proportions for working, sleeping, and relaxing. However, the overview is confused and contains grammatical anomalies, such as claiming that 'sleeping significantly increased' in 1958, which contradicts the data. Furthermore, there is a data reporting error regarding playing sports, citing '75' instead of '7%'. While the response addresses the prompt and meets the minimum word count, the lack of a clear, accurate overview and errors in data transcription prevent it from scoring above Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay uses basic paragraphing to separate the introduction, overview, and body paragraphs for each year. However, the overall progression is disrupted by mechanical and repetitive sentence structures and a lack of smooth cohesive devices. Phrases like 'MADE UP' and 'REPRESENTED' are overused across sentences without effective linking words to guide the reader. Additionally, referencing is occasionally unclear, and the confusion in the overview section breaks the logical flow of the response. This places the performance firmly at Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple verbs like 'represented', 'made up', and 'rose'. There are noticeable lexical errors and inappropriate word choices, such as 'working elder' instead of 'working adults', and typos such as 'PERCENTAGE PF' and 'TEH DAY'. Although the writer attempts some topic-specific vocabulary related to activities, the range is limited and inadequate for a higher band. Frequent errors in word formation and collocation cause some difficulty, justifying a score of 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple and awkwardly concatenated clauses. There are frequent grammatical errors, including severe subject-verb agreement issues, tense confusion (mixing past data with present tense verbs like 'PLAY A SIGNIFICANTLY'), and faulty complex structures (e.g., 'FROM 1958 BETWEEN 2008'). Punctuation and capitalization are also problematic, with multiple consecutive uppercase errors. Because these errors are frequent and occasionally obscure the intended meaning, the grammar aligns with Band 4.0 descriptors.
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