Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart illustrates the changes occurs in the activities of working adults during the five decades .
Over all it can be seen that adult utilizes highest amount of time in working followed by the sleeping activity throughout the period . Relaxing at home and travelling to work surge with the passage of time whereas adult reduces their time to spent with going out with friends and family in the given period. A rarely rise can be observe in playing sport activity .
Working activity consumes the highest percentage of time and extended by 9% while adult reduces their time for sleeping by 7% in the entire era . Adult increment more time for relaxing and travel to work by 5% each . However 13% decline can be observe for going out with family and friends while playing sports remains stable or marginal increaseby 1% in the given period .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student attempts to cover the main features of the two pie charts comparing the time spent by working adults in 1958 and 2008. An overview is provided, noting that working and sleeping took up the most time, while changes occurred in relaxing, travelling, and socializing. Key data points are cited, such as working increasing by 9% and social time declining by 13%. However, there are some inaccuracies and omissions in data reporting; for instance, sleeping is reported as decreasing by 7% (32% to 25%), which is correct, but playing sports (7% in 2008) is introduced as a new category without fully contrasting the zero baseline in 1958 effectively. The response meets the minimum word count successfully, but the development of ideas remains slightly basic and lacks deeper comparative analysis.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is organized into distinct paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and body sentences attempting to group data. However, the logical progression is hindered by poor transitions and weak cohesive devices. Phrases like 'Over all it can be seen' are used, but referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., 'adult utilizes' moving to plural 'adult reduces'). Paragraphing is initiated, but the internal flow of ideas feels disjointed and mechanical. Cohesive devices are either overused in a repetitive manner or lack precision, creating a bumpy reading experience that affects the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary for the task, attempting words related to data trends such as 'utilizes', 'surge', 'reduces', and 'stable'. However, there are noticeable lexical errors and awkward collocations throughout the text, such as 'changes occurs' instead of 'occur', 'A rarely rise can be observe' instead of 'A rare rise can be observed', and 'Adult increment more time' instead of 'increased'. Spelling and word formation issues recur, limiting the range of vocabulary and occasionally causing minor strain for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but grammatical accuracy is weak. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and tense usage, such as 'changes occurs', 'adult utilizes... followed by the sleeping activity', and 'adult reduces their time to spent'. Preposition and word form errors also appear frequently, such as 'increaseby 1%' and 'observe for going out'. While the meaning is mostly salvageable, the high frequency of basic grammatical errors prevents the response from achieving a higher band score.
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