Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The pie charts demonstrate how a person having job utilize their percentage of days in different activities in the year 1958 and 2008 in a particular nation.
Overall, it is evident that most of the time was dedicated for their work and the least was spent on travelling to work.
To begin with, most of their hours are spent on their work which was 33% in 1958 and this figure was rose in 2008 and accounted for 42%. The people spent time for relaxing at home was 8% and was increased by 5% in the year 2008. Moreover, the time spent on sleeping was 32% in 1958 and was reduced to 25% in the year 2008.
Conversely, the least dedicated time was for travelling to work which was 2% and rose to 7% in the year 2008. The people going out with friends or family has spent moderate hours which was 19% in 1958 and dropped to 6% in 2008. Subsequently, the people utilizing time for playing sport was 6% in the year 1958 and 7% in the year 2008.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The student addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features of both pie charts and making relevant comparisons between 1958 and 2008. The overview correctly identifies that work occupied the greatest proportion of time while travelling to work accounted for the least in the overall period. Key data points are generally accurate, such as working rising from 33% to 42% and sleeping decreasing from 32% to 25%. However, there is a minor contradiction in the final paragraph regarding sports, where the text states the 1958 figure was 6% while the visual data shows playing sports was only introduced in 2008 (or not listed for 1958). Overall, the response covers the core requirements well, though the support lacks a deeper synthesis of the overall trends.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response is arranged logically into four paragraphs, including an introduction, an overall summary statement, and two body paragraphs covering the details of the charts. Cohesive devices are used to signal transitions, such as 'To begin with', 'Conversely', and 'Moreover'. However, some of the referencing and linking mechanisms are slightly mechanical or repetitive. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the main trends, ensuring the essay follows a clear overall progression from general to specific details.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for Task 1, including terms such as 'proportion', 'demonstrate', 'accounted for', and 'reduced'. However, there are notable word-choice and collocation errors, such as 'a person having job utilize their percentage of days' instead of 'how working adults spent their time', and awkward phrasing like 'the least dedicated time was for travelling'. Less common lexical items are attempted but occasionally mishandled, restricting the score to a band 6.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, though control over grammar is inconsistent. There are several grammatical errors and awkward structures throughout the text, such as 'this figure was rose in 2008' (tense and voice error), 'The people spent time for relaxing' (missing relative pronoun/participle), and 'the time spent on sleeping was 32%... and was reduced'. While these errors do not severely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent the response from achieving a higher band.
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