Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The pie charts below illustrates which working adults in a specific country spending their time from 1958 to 2008. overall the percentage of the day spending various activities such as going out with friends or family and traveling to work.The percentage of going out with friends or family decreases than 2008. The percentage of traveling to work in 1958 approximately fall the 2008 various activities.The sleeping activities in 1958 decreases percentage than 2008.The relaxing at home grew the ratio than 1958. The numbers of people are working percentage increases than the 1958.The playing of sports are ratio almost minimum increase than previous activities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response falls significantly short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 103 words, which heavily penalises the task achievement score. Furthermore, the content fails to accurately summarise the main trends or make clear, correct comparisons between the two years. For example, the student claims that 'The percentage of going out with friends or family decreases than 2008' and misinterprets several data points. While there is a brief attempt at an overview ('overall the percentage of the day spending various activities...'), key features are poorly selected and confusingly described, resulting in a Band 4.0 performance.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text lacks clear logical organisation and progression. The response is presented as a single block of brief, disconnected sentences rather than a well-structured report with clear paragraphs. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, making it difficult to follow the relationships between data points. For instance, transitional phrases are missing between contrasting points. Referencing is also weak and mechanical, such as abruptly jumping from sleeping to relaxing at home. This corresponds to a Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and frequently inaccurate. The student repeatedly relies on rudimentary phrases like 'The percentage of...' combined with awkward word forms such as 'spending their time' and 'decreases than 2008'. There are numerous word choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'playing of sports are ratio almost minimum increase'. While the topic vocabulary is partially attempted, the lack of control and precision restricts the score to a Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of simple, repetitive sentence structures that are frequently inaccurate. There are major structural errors throughout the text, including missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and faulty comparisons (e.g., 'The percentage of traveling to work in 1958 approximately fall the 2008 various activities'). Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also handled poorly, with missing spaces after full stops. These persistent errors frequently strain the reader's understanding, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0.
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