Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Here, the pie chart demonstract that how working adults spent there time in a particular country in the years 1958 and 2008.

Overall, it is noticable that in both the years indiviudals spent more time in working compera to other activitys.

A glance at the pie charts, reveal that adults spent 33 pecent of there time in 1958 However, it incressed by 9% in 2008.Followed by sleeping 32% but in 2009 it decressed by 8%.In 1958 working people liked more to go out with there kit and kins compera to 2008(6%).

Futher analises of the chats shows that in 1958 2% used to travel to work but in 2008 it surge by 7%.In-addition,in the past people relax less(8%) at home but in 2008 it incresed by 135.In 2008 workinf adults also liked to play different sports compera to past.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response makes an attempt to summarise the main features of the pie charts, noting key changes such as the rise in working hours from 33% to 42% and the drop in sleeping hours. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data reporting; for instance, the writer states that sleeping decreased by 8% in 2009 (referring to 2008) and makes a confusing reference regarding relaxing increasing by "135" (likely a typo for 13% or 13.5%). Furthermore, the overview lacks precision and the response fails to meet the minimum word count of 150 words, coming in at 139 words. Consequently, the task has only been partially addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response attempts a basic structure with an introduction, overall statement, and body details, but the lack of proper paragraphing and mechanical use of cohesive devices restricts coherence. Transitions such as "A glance at the pie charts, reveal" and "Futher analises of the chats shows" are awkward and frequently inaccurate. Referencing is often unclear, such as pronoun usage and timeline references, making the logical progression difficult to follow at times. The overall organisational structure remains underdeveloped.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

Vocabulary is basic and heavily constrained, with frequent spelling errors throughout the text (e.g., "demonstract", "indiviudals", "compera", "activitys", "incressed", "decressed", "Futher", "analises", "chats", "workinf"). While the student attempts some less common vocabulary such as "kit and kins" (an idiom used incorrectly here), the high frequency of lexical inaccuracies and spelling mistakes severely impacts the clarity of the response and strains the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response contains a very limited range of grammatical structures, and simple sentences often contain fundamental errors. There are frequent issues with subject-verb agreement, tense consistency (mixing past and present references awkwardly), and preposition use (e.g., "spent more time in working compera to other activitys"). Punctuation and sentence boundaries are frequently faulty. Error frequency is very high, causing constant difficulty for the reader.

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