Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Hello! Here i am a explaner and i explain the chart that is given to me on computer. Here a paragraph that show two years 1958 and 2008 and how working adults in particular country spent theri time in 1958 there are total 100% ratio of people's. 19% of people's spending time with family and going outside with family and 2% people's traveling to work a lager percentage people only sleeping that 32% ,8% of people relaxing at home and last 33% peoples working that is all explanations is 1958. Here now the time year 2008 also total 100% ratio 7% people's playing sports 6% going out with family and friends, and 7% traveling to work 25% people's still sleeping, 13% peolple relaxating at home and last 2008 42% people's working. And the moral of the topic is that the major changing in both year's now i explain that in deep and you know better.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The student attempts to address the task by reporting figures for both 1958 and 2008, such as mentioning that working accounted for 33% in 1958 and 42% in 2008. However, the response falls short of fully satisfying the requirements of an academic report. The inclusion of conversational filler and a meta-commentary at the beginning ('Hello! Here i am a explaner and i explain the chart') and the end ('And the moral of the topic is...') detracts from the formal register required. Furthermore, there is a lack of a clear overall summary or synthesis of the main trends, which is a key requirement of Task 1. The data is listed somewhat disjointedly without clear grouping or meaningful comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response lacks appropriate paragraphing and is essentially written as two long, run-on blocks of text. Cohesive devices are either missing or used inappropriately, leading to a confusing and mechanical flow of ideas. For instance, sentences are strung together with repetitive conjunctions like 'and' rather than being logically sequenced. While there is a rough chronological division between 1958 and 2008, the overall organization fails to guide the reader smoothly through the data. Referencing and progression are weak, making the text difficult to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently relying on everyday words and phrases such as 'people's spending time', 'going outside', and 'lager percentage' (likely a typo for 'larger'). There are numerous word-formation and spelling errors throughout the text, including 'explaner', 'theri', 'peolple', and 'relaxating'. The student does not demonstrate the ability to use less common lexical items or paraphrase the prompt effectively. Vocabulary choices are restricted and occasionally imprecise, which impacts the overall clarity of the communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response exhibits severe grammatical shortcomings. There is an absence of complex sentence structures, and basic sentence boundaries are frequently ignored, resulting in run-on sentences and comma splices (e.g., '19% of people's spending time with family and going outside with family and 2% people's traveling to work a lager percentage people only sleeping that 32%'). Errors in subject-verb agreement, articles, and prepositions are pervasive. The high frequency of grammatical errors impedes comprehension and demonstrates very limited control over basic sentence forms.

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