Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie charts compare the percentages of the day devoted by the adult people in different activities in a specific country between 1958 to 2008.
Overall, it is clear that in 1958 the biggest time accounted on going out with family/ friends however, in 2008 the smallest time devoted on going out with family/ friends.
To begin with in 1958, the samllest time accounted on travelling to work around 2% while in 2008 it raised to 7%. In addition, in 1958 sleeping time spent accounted 32% meanwhile in 2008, it rapidly grown to 25%.
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AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response is severely under-length, containing only 102 words compared to the minimum requirement of 150 words. This cuts the response short before key features of the charts can be fully reported or compared. Although the student attempts an overview and selects some data points, such as mentioning working hours and travel to work, there are inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the student states that sleeping time 'rapidly grown to 25%', whereas sleep actually decreased from 32% in 1958 to 25% in 2008. Furthermore, the response cuts off mid-sentence at the end. Due to the incomplete nature of the response, failure to meet the word count, and data misinterpretation, a lower band is warranted.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organized into short paragraphs and attempts to use transitional markers such as 'Overall', 'To begin with', and 'In addition'. However, the abrupt cut-off at the end severely disrupts the logical progression of the text. Cohesive devices are mechanically used, and referencing is occasionally faulty, such as confusing trends over time (e.g., stating sleep 'grown' when it decreased). Paragraphing is attempted, but the overall structure remains underdeveloped due to the incomplete writing.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with phrases like 'biggest time accounted on' and 'smallest time devoted on'. There are noticeable lexical errors, such as spelling mistakes ('samllest') and inappropriate collocations ('time spent accounted'). The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for the task, but lexical inaccuracies restrict the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The text demonstrates a limited range of sentence structures, mostly relying on simple or poorly formed complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors, including preposition misuse ('devoted by the adult people in different activities'), tense confusion ('it raised', 'rapidly grown'), and missing elements. Because the text cuts off mid-sentence, grammatical control cannot be fully evaluated beyond the initial sentences, but frequent errors cause noticeable strain for the reader.
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