Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given pie charts illustrate how adult workers spent their time on various activities in a specific country in 1958 and 2008 respectively.
Overall, it is clear that working accounted for the largest share in both years, whereas travelling to work recorded the lowest proportion in 1958 while going out with friends or family showed least segment in 2008.
In 1958, working represented the majority at 33%, followed by sleeping with a minor decline at 32%. By 2008, the percentage of working soared at 42%. In contrast, the segment of sleeping showed a sharp fall to reach at 25% in 2008. Meanwhile, in 2008, going out with friends/family experienced a sharp decline at 6% in comparison with 1958 at the ratio of 19%.
On the other hand, there was a marked rise in relaxing at home and playing sports in 2008 at the percentage of 13% and 7% by 1958 at 8% and 6% respectively. Notably, travelling to work rocketed in 2008 at the ratio of 7% by the percentage of 2% in 1958
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
The student successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features of the pie charts and making relevant comparisons between 1958 and 2008. The overview accurately identifies that working accounted for the largest share in both years, and key trends such as the increase in working hours and the decrease in sleeping time are clearly highlighted. Data points are accurately cited, such as working rising to 42% in 2008 and sleeping falling to 25%. Although playing sports and travelling to work are also mentioned, the response covers all necessary visual elements comprehensively, fulfilling the requirements for Band 7.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response is logically organised with a clear overall progression. It begins with an introductory statement, follows with a well-defined overview, and groups body paragraphs effectively by years and categories. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In contrast', 'Meanwhile', and 'On the other hand' are used to connect ideas, although some transitions and prepositional phrases are slightly awkward or mechanical (e.g., 'to reach at 25%', 'by the percentage of'). Paragraphing is used appropriately, contributing to an easy-to-follow structure throughout the essay.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.0
The student demonstrates an adequate and generally appropriate range of vocabulary for the task. Less common lexical items are attempted, such as 'accounted for', 'represented', 'soared', 'sharply fall', and 'rocketed'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, prepositional collocation, and phrasing, such as 'showed least segment' instead of 'showed the smallest segment', and 'soared at 42%' instead of 'soared to 42%'. Despite these occasional errors, communication is clear and vocabulary is sufficient to convey the numerical data effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0
The response features a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating a reasonable command of grammar. Examples of complex structures include 'while going out with friends or family showed least segment in 2008' and 'in comparison with 1958 at the ratio of 19%'. Grammatical control is generally good, but there are some persistent minor errors, particularly with prepositions and verb forms (e.g., 'reach at', 'by 1958 at 8%', and a missing full stop at the end of the final sentence). Nevertheless, these errors do not impede communication.
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