Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The two pie chart illustrate the percentages of time spent by adults on various activities in 1958 and 2008
Both pie chart shows that people spent their day at work with a proportion of 33% in 1958 and 42% in 2008.Morever,people also spend their day on sleeping noticed in both charts comprising 32% in 1958 and 25% in 2008.Adults also enjoyed going out with freinds and family more with 19% in 1958 whereas,proportion had been decreased to 6% in 2008.Futhermore,adults enjoyed relaxing at a percent of 8% in 1958 and 25% in 2008.Besides,7%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response only minimally addresses the task, falling well short of the 150-word minimum requirement at just 93 words. While the writer attempts to select and report some main features—such as working hours and sleeping percentages—the data is inaccurately reported in places, particularly for relaxing at home where the student claims a figure of 25% for 2008 when the visual data indicates 13%. Furthermore, the overview is absent and the response cuts off abruptly mid-sentence at the end, leaving the information incomplete and poorly developed.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
Information and ideas are presented with some basic arrangement, but there is no clear overall progression or paragraph structure. The entire response is written as a single block of text rather than distinct paragraphs. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, or awkward, with transitional phrases like "Morever" and "Futhermore" used mechanically. Referencing and logical sequencing between sentences are weak, causing the flow of information to feel disjointed and abrupt.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, showing a limited range appropriate for the task. There are several spelling and word-form errors throughout the text, such as "chart" instead of "charts", "Morever", "freinds", and "Futhermore". Word choice is generally simplistic, and while the student attempts some less common vocabulary related to the data, inaccuracies in collocation and spelling prevent the response from achieving a higher lexical band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writing demonstrates a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on repetitive simple sentences with frequent errors. There are issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as "The two pie chart illustrate" missing an 's' on charts. Punctuation and spacing are also problematic, evidenced by missing spaces after commas and periods. Frequent grammatical errors persist across simple and attempted complex structures, though they do not completely obscure the overall meaning.
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