Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two pie charts compares the proportion of time spent by working adults on six different activities in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, the time spent by working adults on working,relaxing at home, and travelling to work were significantly increase over the period. In contrast, going out with friends\ family , sleeping times were decreased considerably. The percentage of time spent on playing sports remained relatively unchanged.

In 1958, working adults spent 33% of their time working, representing the highest proportion. followed by sleeping, at 32% . Going out with friends/ family ranked third, at 19%, while relaxing at home and playing sports accounted for the lowest percentage at 8%, 7%, respectively.

By 2008, Working time had increased to 42%, which meant it remained to represent the largest proportion. Sleeping time ranked second at 25%, Young adult spent much time on relaxing at home as it increased to 13% and ranked the third. each activities playing sports and travelling shared 7% . Followed by going out with friends/family, at 6%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons across both years. The overview correctly identifies overall trends, such as the increase in working time and the decrease in sleeping and socialising. However, some minor inaccuracies appear in the overview and body paragraphs, such as misclassifying 'travelling to work' as increasing when it remained at 7% in 2008 (or misinterpreting its overall trajectory from 1958's 2%), and stating that playing sports remained unchanged when it was only recorded in 2008 at 7%. Furthermore, ideas are sometimes slightly underdeveloped or unclearly supported by data, such as referring to 'Young adult' in the final paragraph. These elements place the response firmly in the middle tier of achievement, displaying solid coverage of the prompt with room for greater precision and thoroughness in data reporting.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The text maintains a coherent overall arrangement with a clear division into paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs for each year. Information and ideas are generally presented in a logical sequence. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or faulty, as seen in the awkward transition 'followed by sleeping, at 32% .' which is punctuated as a sentence fragment, and the slightly disjointed flow in the final paragraph. Referencing and cohesive devices are adequate for the task, but they lack the flexibility and seamless progression required for higher bands. Paragraphing is used sufficiently to structure the response, though the internal connections between sentences could be smoothed to improve readability.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The writer demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms related to time allocation and data reporting, such as 'proportion', 'considerably', and 'accounted for'. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary and comparative structures, but these are occasionally coupled with inaccuracies in word choice or phrasing, such as 'Young adult spent much time on relaxing' instead of 'adults spent more time'. Spelling is generally accurate, but minor slips and unnatural collocations prevent the vocabulary from achieving greater precision. Nevertheless, the lexical range is sufficient to communicate the main points clearly without impeding the reader's understanding.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating attempts at comparative structures and relative clauses. However, there are persistent errors in grammar and punctuation throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues in the opening sentence ('The two pie charts compares'), tense confusion in the overview ('were significantly increase' instead of 'increased'), punctuation errors like comma splices or misplaced periods ('at 32% .'), and missing articles or pluralisation errors in the final paragraph ('each activities'). While these errors do not severely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to restrict the response to this level. A better control over verb forms and prepositional phrasing would significantly enhance grammatical accuracy.

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