Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart demonstrates the proportion of adults who have worked in a country, in the years, 1958 and 2008.

Overall, the proportion for working is greater in both years whilst sleeping on second rank in adults. Other activities like, relaxing, travelling, and going out are less than working.

As fa the concern of 1958, adults spent most of their time on woking with higher percentage of 33. Than activity preferred is sleeping with the percentage of 32. While in 2008, working percentages reached at highest with increased percentage about nine times. Subsequently, sleepin percentage inn 2008 decreased. Adults prefered to relax themselves that was not preferred in 1958.

Looking at both proportions, going out with families was at percentage og 19 whilst in 2008, it lessend to stuck only on 6 percent. Travelling was lowest in 1958 as compared to 2008, in which it is 5 percent higher. Sport time remained durable during the both years as it was not affected.

In conclusion, the proportions depicts slight and sharp differences in various activities of adults in two years in a particular country.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response partially addresses the task by selecting some main features and making basic comparisons between the two years, such as noting the changes in working and sleeping percentages. However, the selection of data is somewhat incomplete and confused in places, such as the incorrect mathematical claim that the working percentage increased 'about nine times' from 33% to 42%. Additionally, there is a misunderstanding of the chart's subject, with the opening statement claiming the chart shows 'the proportion of adults who have worked,' rather than how working adults spent their time across different activities. The overview attempts to summarize general trends, but the lack of accurate data interpretation and under-developed comparisons keep this response at this level. To reach a higher standard, the writer needs to ensure all data is read accurately and provide a clearer, more precise overview of the key trends without factual distortions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has an overall coherent arrangement, utilizing basic paragraphing to structure the introduction, body details, and conclusion. Ideas are generally grouped logically, with body paragraphs attempting to contrast the two years. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical and faulty, evident in awkward transitional phrases like 'As fa the concern of 1958' and abrupt shifts between sentences. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as the pronoun use in 'Adults prefered to relax themselves that was not preferred in 1958.' While paragraphing is present, the logical progression within paragraphs is hindered by repetitive phrasing and inadequate cohesive devices. To improve Coherence and Cohesion, the writer should employ a wider and more natural range of transition markers to link ideas smoothly and ensure that referencing between sentences is precise and unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited but minimally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to convey basic concepts related to time spent on activities. There are several noticeable errors in word choice, spelling, and collocation that detract from the response, such as 'woking', 'sleepin', 'prefered', 'lessend', and 'stuck only on 6 percent'. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, but these attempts often result in unnatural phrasing or inaccuracies. Spelling mistakes like 'woking' and 'sleepin' occur multiple times, causing some difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher band for Lexical Resource, the writer must expand their vocabulary range, use precise terms for describing statistical data without colloquialisms, and check spelling and word forms carefully to minimize errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response demonstrates a limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences alongside some attempts at complex forms that are frequently faulty. Examples of grammatical errors include missing articles ('on second rank'), incorrect prepositional usage ('at percentage og 19'), and awkward verb tense or voice handling ('adults who have worked'). Frequent errors in grammar and punctuation persist throughout the text, although they rarely completely impede overall communication. To move to a higher band, the writer needs to increase sentence variety by producing a greater mix of error-free complex structures, while paying closer attention to subject-verb agreement, accurate prepositions, and article usage.

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