Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The pie chart represent the percentage of the day spent by working adultts on various activities overall it is lucid that in both charts the working activities was maximum in both charts and the other were minimumfetching into details the working activities was highest followed by sleeping accounted at 33% other were mimimum moving to the sleeping it was accounted at 32% and it was the second highest activitie perform by adults aqnd come to the going out with friends family accounted at 19% and it a third heighest activcity accounted at19% consedering the remaining details in the second chart wecan saw that both the working activities were maximum accounted at 42% moreover travelling to work 7%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, stopping at only 117 words. Furthermore, the selection and reporting of data are very limited and inaccurate in places. For instance, the student states that working activities accounted for 33% in both charts, whereas the data shows 33% for 1958 and 42% for 2008. Sleeping is incorrectly assigned 33% instead of 32% for 1958, and some data points are completely misunderstood or confused, resulting in a minimal and incomplete response to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
The text lacks clear overall progression and logical paragraphing, as it is written as a single, dense block of text without proper sentence boundaries or punctuation. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, leading to run-on sentences like 'overall it is lucid that...'. While there is a loose attempt to move through different parts of the data, the lack of punctuation and clear discourse markers makes the arrangement difficult to follow and results in a highly fragmented reading experience.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with several instances of incorrect word choices, spelling errors, and awkward collocations. Examples of lexical weaknesses include 'adultts', 'activitie', 'aqnd', 'heighest', 'activcity', and 'consedering'. The student attempts to use some task-related vocabulary such as 'percentage', 'activities', and 'travelling', but the frequent inaccuracies in word form and spelling restrict communication and keep the lexical range at a basic level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on faulty run-on sentences joined by commas or lacking punctuation entirely. There are frequent errors in verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and articles, such as 'The pie chart represent' instead of 'represents', and 'the working activities was' instead of 'were'. Punctuation is almost completely neglected throughout the text, leading to severe structural issues that occasionally strain the reader's understanding.
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