Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The following pie charts illustrate the percentages of spendage of time by working adults on various activities in the years of 1958 and 2008, along with the changes in percentages.

By overall analysis, we can gather that working hours in the day of working adults have increased significantly by the year of 2008, since 1958, alongside the hours spent on relaxing at home and travelling to work by a gradual margin. The percentage of hours spent on sleeping and going out with friends and family decreased by a significant margin while hours invested in playing ports remained stable.

The first chart shows the percenatges gathered in the year of 1958, among which sleeping and working held the highest proportions of 32% and 33%. The time spent in going out with family and friends hold significant proportion of 19%, wile relaxing at home and playing sports has proportions of 8% and 6%, with travelling to work contributing to 2%.

The chart illustrating the year of 2008 shows data that working hours contibuted to 42% of spendage, sleeping making 25% in chart, relaxing at home contributing to 13% of spendage. The percentage held by travelling to work and playing sports hold 7% each,with family and friends having 6% of time in a day od working adult.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response successfully addresses all parts of the prompt by presenting an overview and reporting the main features of the two pie charts from 1958 and 2008. Key figures such as the rise in working hours from 33% to 42% and the drop in sleeping time from 32% to 25% are accurately identified and compared. However, some aspects are unevenly developed or contain slight inaccuracies; for instance, the writer mentions that playing sports remained stable, but the data indicates it was 0% in 1958 and 7% in 2008, meaning it actually appeared as a new activity rather than remaining stable. To reach a higher band, the overview and details must present every trend with complete accuracy and extend the comparisons between the two years more thoroughly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The report has a coherent overall arrangement and follows a logical structure, beginning with an introductory paragraph, followed by a clear overview, and then body paragraphs detailing each year. Cohesive devices are used to guide the reader through the data, such as phrases like 'By overall analysis', 'The first chart shows', and 'The chart illustrating the year'. However, cohesion can sometimes feel mechanical or repetitive, and referencing is occasionally affected by phrasing choices. Paragraphing is used sufficiently to separate the introduction, overview, and specific chart details, but a more flexible and varied use of transition signals would elevate the response to the next level.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate to accomplish the task, with attempts to use less common items and varied reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'proportions', 'contributed', and 'invested'. Nevertheless, there are noticeable lexical errors, awkward word choices, and non-standard collocations throughout the text. Examples include 'percentages of spendage of time', 'playing ports' (a typo for sports), and stating that family and friends 'hold significant proportion'. These inaccuracies do not completely impede communication, but they restrict the score. To improve, the writer should focus on natural word formation, accurate collocations, and avoiding repetitive or unnatural phrasing like 'spendage'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response features a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating an attempt to handle multi-clause structures such as 'while hours invested in playing ports remained stable'. There are some errors in grammar and punctuation, including preposition and article issues like 'in the day of working adults' and 'od working adult', as well as subject-verb agreement slips such as 'The percentage held by travelling to work and playing sports hold'. Fortunately, these errors rarely impede communication and the meaning remains clear. To achieve a higher band, the writer needs to produce a greater proportion of error-free complex sentences and exercise tighter control over articles and prepositions.

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