Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the chart showes the percentage of the day spent by working aduits on various activities of 1958 and 2008
com
parisan:
in1958
.1:people going out with friends
2;people traveling to work
3;people sleep the most
4;relaxing at home
5;working
overall acoording to given percent
people do work or sleep the most
in 2008
1;playing sports
going out with friends
and all these work sre same as 1958
overall the cange is in 1958 people sleep more than 2008
travelling to work is increase in 2008
going out with friends decrease in 2008
woking is increase in 2008
relaxing at home increase in 2008
thats the comparison
most of the works are increansing by the year increase like improvement
in working it show that people become more sincear about their carears and it develope the economy and make peoples hardworker and thats the golden point of the years gap is it
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response makes a minimal attempt to address the task by noting some general information from the pie charts, such as mentioning that working and sleeping accounted for large proportions in 1958, and pointing out changes between the two years like an increase in working and travelling. However, the format is highly fragmented, resembling rough notes rather than a cohesive report. Important data points and precise comparisons are missing or presented in a very basic list format. To move to a higher band, the writer needs to select and report the main features clearly, provide accurate figures to support the comparisons, and present a well-developed overview of the overall trends instead of disjointed points.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
The information and ideas are not arranged in a coherent manner. The text lacks standard essay paragraphing, instead breaking into disjointed lists, numbering, and abrupt section headers like 'com-parisan:' and 'thats the comparison'. While some basic linking words like 'overall' are attempted, cohesive devices are generally inadequate and used incorrectly to structure the text. There is no clear logical progression from an introduction to body paragraphs and a proper summary. To improve, the writer must organise information into clear paragraphs with logical sequencing, use appropriate cohesive devices to connect sentences and ideas, and avoid using fragmented bullet-point styles in academic writing.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and restricted to simple everyday terms such as 'work', 'sleep', 'play', and 'increase'. There are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the response, including 'showes', 'aduits', 'acoording', 'cange', 'woking', 'increansing', 'sincear', 'carears', and 'develope', some of which strain the reader's understanding. To achieve a higher band, the writer needs to develop a wider and more accurate range of vocabulary appropriate for academic writing, particularly terms relating to data representation, percentages, and trends, while paying much closer attention to standard English spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and broken sentence structures. There are frequent errors in verb forms, tense usage, and basic sentence construction, such as 'the chart showes the percentage', 'people sleep the most', and 'travelling to work is increase'. Punctuation and capitalization are also poorly controlled, with missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences and improper use of numbers and colons. To progress to a higher band, the writer must demonstrate control over basic grammatical structures, ensure correct verb tenses when describing past data, and construct complete, grammatically sound sentences.
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