Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates the porpotion of working adults in a particular country that how spent their day in 1958 and 2008.

Overall,it is noticable that adults spent most of their time in working and sleeping in both given years.while, other activities seems to be less common bye various activities.The most high proportion is owned by working in both of the years.

In detail,the porpotion of working which is done by adults was 33% in 1958.In contrast, the time spent on sleeping was 32% which is 4 percent higher than relaxing at home and 16 percent higher than travelling to work.the most time spent by adults after sleeping was going out with friends/family which was 19%.

By 2008, the percentage of working increase and rose to about 9% and the actual percentage was 42%.wheareas, the porpotion of sleeping was decline and arrive the level of 25% and the other activities was also less common than 1958.the people who relaxing at home increase and its porpotion was 13% and travelling to work was 7% and the the time when adults going out with their families decrease and it was 6%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the main features of the two pie charts, highlighting working and sleeping as the dominant activities in both 1958 and 2008. However, the task is only partially covered because some data points contain inaccuracies or confusion, such as the statement that working increased by 'about 9%' while also stating the actual 2008 percentage was 42% (which mathematically is an increase of 9 percentage points from 33%, but the phrasing is confusing). Furthermore, the overview mentions that other activities seem less common due to 'various activities', which is unclear and underdeveloped. Key comparisons between the years are attempted, but the support lacks clarity and precision, placing this response at the halfway point for task achievement where ideas remain somewhat limited and under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a clear attempt to structure the response into an introduction, an overview, and detail paragraphs. However, overall progression is hindered by mechanical and faulty cohesion, as well as poor punctuation and spacing throughout the text (e.g., 'Overall,it is noticable', 'years.while, other'). Paragraphing is present, but internal referencing and logical flow are compromised by awkward transitions like 'In detail,' and 'By 2008,'. While the essay has a coherent overall arrangement and attempts to group information logically, the inadequate and inaccurate use of cohesive devices keeps the response firmly at this intermediate level.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The student uses a limited but minimally adequate range of vocabulary suitable for describing statistical data, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', and 'increase'. However, there are numerous noticeable errors in word form, spelling, and word choice that cause difficulty for the reader, such as 'porpotion' (repeatedly misspelled), 'noticable', 'wheareas', and awkward phrasing like 'the most high proportion is owned by working'. Attempts to use less common vocabulary are often marred by collocation and spelling inaccuracies, restricting the lexical score to this level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer demonstrates a limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and basic subject-verb constructions. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, seen in problematic clauses like 'that how spent their day' and 'the people who relaxing at home increase'. There are frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles throughout the text—such as 'sleeping was decline and arrive the level' and 'the percentage of working increase'. These frequent grammatical and punctuation errors cause noticeable disruption and difficulty for the reader.

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