Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The pie charts compare how working adults spent their time in a specific country in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, the working adults spent their maximum amount of time on working in both the years. Time spent on going out with friends decreased significantly from 19 % in 1958 to only 6 % in 2008. While sleeping time decreased by 7 percentage points, time spent on travelling to work and relaxing at home increased in these 50 years.

Working adults witnessed an increase of 9 percentage points in working time from 33 % in 1958 to 42 % in 2008. While the gap between times spent on working and sleeping was only one percentage point with sleeping occupying 32 % of the day in 1958, it increased to 17 percentage points with sleeping time decreasing to 25 % in 2008. Time spent on playing sports remained almost the same in both the years.

Travelling to work witnessed an increase from 2 % to 7 % in this period. Similarly, working adults spent 13 percent of their time on relaxing at home in 2008 compared to 8 percent in 1958.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response satisfies the requirements by covering all parts of the visual data, presenting a clear overview, and selecting key trends for comparison. You successfully highlight major shifts, such as the increase in working hours and the dramatic drop in time spent going out with friends. Data points are accurately cited, including percentages like 33% and 42% for working time, and changes are quantified effectively using percentage points. To move closer to a higher band, the overview could be slightly more holistic by capturing the broader structural shift across multiple categories rather than focusing primarily on the single largest activity, and minor features such as playing sports remaining identical could have been integrated more smoothly into the broader narrative.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response demonstrates a clear logical organization and progression throughout. Information is divided into logical paragraphs, beginning with an introduction and overview, followed by specific body paragraphs analyzing contrasting trends. Cohesive devices are used flexibly, such as 'Overall', 'While', and 'Similarly', which help guide the reader through the comparisons between 1958 and 2008. Referencing is generally clear, and information is well-sequenced. To achieve a higher level of cohesion, cohesive devices could be managed with even greater subtlety, avoiding slight repetition in transitional structures like 'While' at the beginning of consecutive sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

An adequate and sufficient range of vocabulary is used to describe data trends effectively, with appropriate reporting language such as 'witnessed an increase', 'decreased significantly', and 'occupying'. You demonstrate some flexibility by expressing changes in both percentages and percentage points. However, there are minor awkwardness issues and occasional inaccuracies in word choice or collocation, such as 'maximum amount of time on working', which prevents the vocabulary score from reaching a higher tier. Spelling and word choice errors do not impede communication, but incorporating more sophisticated or less common lexical items with native-like precision would elevate this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 7.5

You demonstrate a strong command of grammatical structures, successfully utilizing a mix of simple and complex sentence forms. There are frequent error-free sentences, such as 'Time spent on going out with friends decreased significantly from 19 % in 1958 to only 6 % in 2008', which show good control of tense and prepositions. Punctuation and sentence demarcation are handled effectively. A few minor slips persist, such as 'in both the years' instead of 'in both years', which keeps the score at this solid level. Maintaining this level of complex sentence control while eliminating minor prepositional lapses will help secure top-tier results.

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