Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The give pie charts illustrates the proportion of how adults working spent thier time in a particular country during 1958 and 2008. Although, it demonstrate the percentages of adults working in various fields.

To commence with, in both pie charts adults work in similar activities such as working which takes the highest time in both charts, whereas, travelling to work obtain limited number of time in both pie charts. Additionally, there are also numerous other activities like relaxing at home, sleeping, going out with friends/family, and playing sports.

On the other hand, in 1958 the highest time spent by adults are on working which stands at 33%, whereas, in 2008 it is slightly raise about 42%. Instead of this relaxing at home aquires 8% of time in 1958, while, it also steadily increase and stands at 13%. Furthermore, in 1958 adults consume their 33% of time in sleeping, however, it gradually decline in 2008 and stands near about 25%. Moreover, travelling contains 2% of adults working time in 1958, while 7% in 2008. In addition to this, in 1958 19% of time covered by their family and friend which they spent outside, nevertheless, in 2008 it rapidly decrease about 6%. At the last playing sports obtain 7% of their time in 2008.

In conclusion, these pie charts provides infromative information about the working time of adults.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features and making comparisons between the two years, which keeps it above the lower bands. However, the development is somewhat restricted and mechanically repetitive. For instance, the opening misinterprets the data slightly by stating the charts show adults working in "various fields," whereas the data actually depicts how time is distributed across different daily activities. While the main figures are reported, such as working increasing from 33% to 42% and sleeping declining from 32% to 25%, some interpretations lack precision. To reach a higher standard, the overview needs to synthesize the broader trends more clearly without minor misinterpretations, and the body paragraphs should integrate the data points more smoothly to highlight significant shifts rather than listing each category in a formulaic manner.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay presents a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt at paragraphing, moving from an introduction to body paragraphs and a brief conclusion. Cohesive devices are employed to structure the response, utilizing transitional phrases such as "To commence with," "Additionally," "On the other hand," and "In conclusion." However, the use of these cohesive devices is at times mechanical or somewhat faulty, such as "Instead of this" and "At the last," which detracts from natural flow and precise logical relationships. Paragraphing is present, but internal progression within paragraphs could be better managed to ensure smoother transitions between individual data comparisons. Refining the variety and accuracy of cohesive links will help achieve a more seamless progression throughout the text.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms related to proportions and activities, such as "proportion," "activities," "relaxing," and "travelling." However, lexical control is inconsistent. There are several noticeable spelling and word choice errors, including "give" instead of "given," "thier" instead of "their," "demonstrate" instead of "demonstrates," "obtain" instead of "account for" or "occupy," "aquires," and "infromative." While these errors do not completely impede communication, they restrict the lexical score. To improve, the writer needs to expand the range of vocabulary used for reporting data trends—such as using varied verbs and adverbial modifiers—and eliminate basic spelling mistakes through careful proofreading.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a limited range of structures, relying mostly on straightforward sentence patterns alongside frequent attempts at complex sentences that contain grammatical errors. Examples of structural and agreement issues include "how adults working spent thier time" (word order and tense), "adults work in similar activities such as working which takes" (relative clause punctuation and verb agreement), "the highest time spent by adults are on working" (subject-verb agreement), and "it is slightly raise" (incorrect passive/active verb form). Frequent errors in verb forms, prepositions, and tense consistency occur throughout the text and frequently cause difficulty for the reader. Incorporating a wider mix of error-free complex structures and ensuring accurate verb tense handling are essential steps for improvement.

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