Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts gives informations about propotions of day spent by adults in one country from 1958 to 2008.

Overal, in both time peroid adults spend majority their time working while the sleeping, another noteable feature is sleeping has gone down troughout the period.

Working had the majority share in tome of adults in both 1958 and 2008, at 33 percent and 42 percent respectively. Further more people 1958 used to sleep more at 32 percent compared to 25 percent in 2008.

In 2008, adults tend to spend more time relaxing at home at 13 pecent whereas in 1958 people only spent 8 persent of their time relaxing at home. Time traveling to work took only 2 percent in contrast it took 7 percent of time in 2008. People in 1958 spend almost quarter of their time going out with friends and family compared to only 6 percent in 2008. Finally, In both years adults spent same amount of time playing sports at 7 percent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern that working took the largest share in both years and that sleeping declined, and you support these points with accurate figures. The comparisons for relaxing, commuting and socialising also cover the key changes, so the response addresses the task well. However, the overview is brief and its wording is unclear (“while the sleeping”), and it does not summarise the full range of changes. Most importantly, the final claim that sports occupied 7% in both years is not supported: the chart shows sports only in 2008, at 7%. To strengthen the response further, give a clearer overview of the major increases and decreases and avoid treating an unreported 1958 figure as equal.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response follows a generally sensible order: it begins with an overview, compares work and sleep, then reports the remaining activities. This makes the information easy to follow overall. Basic linking expressions such as “whereas,” “compared to,” and “Finally” help signal comparisons. However, the paragraphing is not clearly developed, and some transitions feel mechanical or imprecise, particularly “Further more people 1958” and “another noteable feature.” The overview sentence also joins ideas in a way that makes their relationship unclear. Grouping the main increases together and the decreases together, with a distinct overview paragraph, would create smoother progression and clearer links between comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for describing the charts, including “majority share,” “compared to,” and “in contrast,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “informations,” “propotions,” “Overal,” “tome,” “pecent,” and “persent.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “majority share in tome of adults” and “spend almost quarter.” Use standard chart language consistently and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “proportion,” “accounted for,” and “declined” would help you describe the data more naturally without making the writing unnecessarily complex.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more developed sentence forms, and most of the comparisons remain understandable. There are, however, recurring errors in agreement, articles, tense and sentence construction. For example, “The charts gives” should use a plural verb, while “adults spend majority their time” needs an article and a clearer grammatical pattern. “Further more people 1958 used to sleep” is missing a preposition and has an awkward tense choice; “In both years adults spent same amount” also needs an article. The overview sentence is difficult to parse because of its structure. Practise accurate comparison patterns such as “the figure rose from…to…” and “adults spent a larger proportion…” while varying sentence forms.

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