Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The provided pie charts compares the pattern on how the working individuals from a particular nation spent their time in the year 1958 and 2008.

Overall, the daily hours given towards work by the average working adults has increased, directly resulting into less and less time spent with family and friends.

FIrstly, we can observe that, the working hours were less by almost 9 percent in the year 1958 in comaprision to the 42% spent on the year 2008. Subsequently, people living in the 1900's were able to give almost 19% of their day to their family and friends which as decreased to only 6% over the period of 50 years.

Furthermore, time spent while travelling to work and the time spent for relaxation has seen a slight increase of 5% over the period of time. On the other hand, the time spent on sleep has seen a decrease of 7% from its initial 32% in the year 1958.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main contrast accurately: working rises from 33% to 42%, while time spent with friends and family falls from 19% to 6%. You also report the changes in travel, relaxation and sleep, so the response addresses the chart’s key categories. However, the overview is limited to work and socialising, and the later comparisons are not fully precise: travel rises by five percentage points, but relaxation rises by five as well; calling these changes “slight” does not convey their relative significance. The chart also shows sports at 7% in 2008, which is omitted. A fuller overview comparing the largest categories and noting the new sports category would make the main features more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs of supporting comparisons. Sequencing words such as “Overall,” “Firstly,” “Subsequently,” and “Furthermore” help guide the reader through the information. However, the progression is somewhat mechanical, and the final paragraph groups travel, relaxation and sleep without clearly distinguishing their individual figures or linking them to the main overview. The opening overview also focuses on only two trends, leaving the reader without a concise picture of the other important changes. Use more direct comparisons between the years and organise related categories together; this would make the progression more cohesive and the relationships between details clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing chart data, including “increased,” “decreased,” “over the period,” and “initial.” These choices make the main trends understandable. There are, however, several awkward or inaccurate expressions, such as “pattern on how,” “time given towards work,” and “resulting into,” which reduce naturalness. “People living in the 1900’s” is also an imprecise way to refer to the adults represented in 1958, and “comaprision” and “FIrstly” contain spelling or capitalisation errors. Aim for standard chart-reporting collocations such as “the proportion of the day spent working” and “compared with.” This would improve precision while retaining the useful range already attempted.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the overview sentence with “resulting” and the contrast introduced by “On the other hand.” Most of the intended meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors are noticeable. For example, “The provided pie charts compares” has subject–verb disagreement, while “the average working adults has increased” mismatches the plural subject and verb. In “which as decreased,” the verb form is incorrect, and “the time spent for relaxation has seen” uses an awkward grammatical pattern. Commas are also placed inconsistently, as in “we can observe that, the working hours.” Check agreement and verb forms, and use simpler, controlled sentence patterns when describing each change.

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