Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie charts illustrate the working of adults in different country spent their time in daily routine in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, in both charts the area woking hits most rather then other routines and the traveling of adults in 1958 have a lowest percentage. In the other chart the time of going with freinds and have have a lowest ratio.

On the first hand, in 1958 adults mainly spending their time on working and sleeping rather then other things which is 33% time they spend on their work and 32% on sleeping. In this year all the adults not traveling two much its about 2% but they spend more time with friends and family which is 19%. They not relaxing too much because of working.

On the other hand, in 2008 all the adults work more hard then 1958 adults because they spend 42% of their time on working and 25% time for sleeping which is enough for adults. they are not spend much time with their friends and family they prefer to relax their self at home and spend 13% time at home

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main contrast that working takes the largest share in both years, and you report several key figures accurately, including working and sleeping in 1958, travel in 1958, and working and sleeping in 2008. However, the overview is incomplete: it does not clearly summarise the major changes, such as the rise in working and travel and the fall in time spent with friends and family. The account of 2008 also omits the figures for travel and going out, and it does not mention the new sports category. Some claims, such as that 25% is “enough” sleep or that adults worked harder, add unsupported interpretation rather than describing the chart. Select and compare the main changes more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two years. The phrases “On the first hand” and “On the other hand” signal a contrast, but the organisation is mainly year-by-year rather than consistently comparing the categories across the charts. Some links are unclear or repetitive, and the overview’s reference to “the other chart” makes the comparison less precise. The final paragraph also ends without a clear concluding comparison. Grouping related changes—for example, increases in work and travel alongside decreases in sleep and socialising—would create a clearer progression. Use linking expressions selectively and make sure each sentence connects directly to the chart information.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the general topic, with relevant terms such as “percentage,” “working,” “sleeping,” and “relaxing.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “the area woking hits most” is not a natural way to describe the largest share, while “going with freinds” and “relax their self” are unclear or incorrectly formed expressions. Spelling errors such as “woking” and “freinds” also reduce precision. Aim for standard chart language such as “accounted for,” “share,” “rose,” and “fell,” and use accurate activity labels from the chart.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the reader can generally identify the years and activities being discussed. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction frequently make the writing awkward or unclear. For instance, “adults mainly spending their time” lacks a finite verb, while “they are not spend” uses an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “Overall” also contains a faulty construction, and several sentences run together or have unclear clause relationships. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses: for example, “In 1958, adults spent 33% of their day working, compared with 42% in 2008.” Check each sentence for a subject, a correctly formed verb, and clear punctuation.

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