Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Given pie charts depicts the percentage of time spent by adults on leisure activities from a nation in different years.

The measure change we can see is the percentage of working hours in 1958 people used to spend one third of their time on jobs however in 2008 that number has increased significantly and reached to almost below half(42%). In 2008 people spend more time at home for relaxation compare to 1958 and the percentage of time is 13% and *% respectively. People used to spend almost double amount of time in travelling which 7% in 2008 while in 1958 that percentage was minimal. in 1958 adults spent 19% of their time with family and friends while in 2008 that number has decresed to below half which is 6%.The number of percentage are almost equal for playing sports and that is 7%.

Here we can see the differece that has been observed in a 5 decades of time for the amount of time adults spent on doing leisure activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant changes, including the rise in working time from 33% to 42%, the fall in time with friends and family from 19% to 6%, and the increase in commuting. However, the response only partly summarises the charts: it gives no clear overview of the main pattern, and the opening incorrectly describes the activities as leisure, although work is the largest category. The 1958 figure for relaxing at home is left as “*%,” and the statement that sports time was “almost equal” in both years is unsupported: sports is shown only for 2008, at 7%. To strengthen the report, state the main contrasts clearly and include accurate comparisons for the categories shown.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation: the response begins with an introduction, then reports several comparisons, and ends with a brief concluding sentence. However, the progression is not consistently clear, and the final sentence repeats the general idea rather than providing a useful overview. Connections between points are often abrupt, while “however,” “while,” and “which” do not always link the information accurately. The long middle section combines several categories in one paragraph, making the comparisons difficult to follow. Use a clear overview paragraph followed by logically grouped comparisons—for example, increases in work, home relaxation and commuting, then decreases in sleep and socialising—and make each sentence’s reference explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant vocabulary, such as “percentage,” “increased,” “decreased,” and “relaxation,” so the main topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or awkward, including “working hours” for the share of the day spent working, “amount of time in travelling,” and “the number of percentage.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “decresed” and “differece,” and the repeated use of “time” and “percentage” makes the report less precise. Choose standard chart-reporting expressions and check spelling; for example, describe a category’s “share” or “proportion” and say that time “spent commuting rose.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences to compare years, but control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships unclear. For example, “The measure change we can see is” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “the percentage of time is 13% and *% respectively” has an incomplete comparison. There are also problems with articles, agreement and verb forms, as in “Given pie charts depicts” and “people spend more time … compare to 1958.” Sentence boundaries and capitalisation are unreliable, particularly where a new sentence begins with lowercase “in.” Aim first for accurate, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then add controlled comparison clauses such as “whereas” or “compared with.”

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