Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie charts compare the time spent on different activities by employed adults in two different years 1958 and 2008.

Overall, working accounted for the highest proportion of adults' time in both 1958 and 2008. In contrast, travelling to work had the lowest percentage in 1958 while going out with friends and family represented the least time spent in 2008.

In 1958, working accounted for the highest percentage of the adults's time, at 33% while sleeping represented the second highest percentage of 32%. In addition, adults spent 19% of their time in going out with their family and friends while relaxing at home stood at 8%. Finally, travelling to work recorded as the least amount of time, just at 2%.

In 2008, working had the highest figure with 42% of time spent by adults while sleeping recorded the percentage of 25%. Moreover, relaxing at home represented the percentage of 13%. In addition, playing sports and travelling to work, both accounted for 7%. Finally, going out with friends and family made up only 6% of the total percentage.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: working takes the largest share in both years, while commuting is smallest in 1958 and socialising is smallest in 2008. The figures you report are consistent with the charts, and the separate year-by-year paragraphs cover the categories clearly. The overview, however, mainly identifies the extremes; it could better summarise the broader changes, such as the rise in working, relaxing at home and commuting, alongside the falls in sleeping and going out. The 2008 account also lists the figures without drawing out these contrasts. This is a relevant and generally clear response, but some key features are reported more fully than they are compared or synthesised.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response has a clear structure: an introduction, an overview, and one paragraph for each year. The information progresses logically, and the reader can readily follow the figures. Linking expressions such as “In addition,” “Moreover,” and “Finally” help signal the sequence, while the overview gives the reader a useful guide to the main extremes. However, the repeated list-like pattern and frequent use of “In addition” and “Finally” make some cohesion mechanical. Stronger links between the years—for example, directly contrasting the increase in working with the decline in sleeping—would create a more integrated comparison rather than two separate inventories. Overall, organisation is clear and effective, with some room for more flexible cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “represented,” “proportion,” and “made up,” and the meaning remains clear throughout. There is some variation in how you describe the percentages, but several phrases are repetitive or imprecise: “highest percentage,” “represented the percentage of,” and “the total percentage” recur or sound unnatural. “Adults’s time” also shows an inaccurate possessive form, and “time in going out” is an awkward collocation. Aim for concise, natural chart language such as “share of the day,” “spent 19% socialising,” or “stood at 13%.” The vocabulary is sufficient for the task, though more precise collocations and less repetition would improve flexibility and control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and more developed sentence forms, and most of the information is conveyed without difficulty. For example, the overview uses a clear contrast with “In contrast,” and the year paragraphs include several correctly formed clauses. Some grammatical errors remain: “adults’s time” has an incorrect possessive, and the sentence beginning “In 1958, working accounted…” needs clearer punctuation around the figures and clauses. In “travelling to work recorded as the least amount,” the verb construction is incomplete; use “was recorded as” or, more naturally, “accounted for the smallest share.” The repeated sentence patterns also limit the range on display. Greater accuracy in possessives and clause construction, alongside more varied complex structures, would strengthen the response.

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