Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie charts illustrate the proportions of the day utilized by working adults on several activities between 1958 and 2008.

Overall, In the year 1958, working made up the highest proportion, followed by sleeping. Whereas, going out with friends/families stood at third place. In contrast, travelling to work accounted for the smallest share. Meanwhile in the year 2008, working represented the largest category, followed by sleeping. In contrast, going out with friends/family represented considerably lower proportions.

Starting with the proportions of 1958, working made up the highest proportion with the figure accounting for 33%. While sleeping stood at second place with the percentage of 32%. Whereas, the figure for going out with family/friends stood at just 19%. Meanwhile, relaxing at home and travelling to work represented considerably lower proportions of 8% and 2% respectively.

Turning to the percentages of the year 2008, working shared the highest proportion of 42%, followed by the proportion of sleeping standing at just 25%. While relaxing at home stood at third place with the figure of 13%. Meanwhile, travelling to work and playing sports both represented the percentage of 7% each. In contrast, going out with friends/family represented the smallest proportion of just 6%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both years and report the main figures accurately, including the rise in working from 33% to 42%, the fall in sleeping from 32% to 25%, and the sharp decline in socialising from 19% to 6%. The overview also identifies working as the largest category and travelling as the smallest in 1958. This gives the response a clear account of the charts. However, the overview is less complete for 2008: it does not clearly identify going out as the smallest category or mention the new sports category, and it repeats rankings rather than summarising the most important changes across the period. To strengthen the response, compare the major increases and decreases directly in the overview and make the key 2008 features explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear four-part structure: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph for each year. The chronological organisation makes the figures easy to follow, and phrases such as “Starting with” and “Turning to” signal the shift between chart years. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical because “Meanwhile,” “Whereas,” and “In contrast” recur frequently, including where no real contrast is being made. Some sentence fragments also interrupt the flow, such as “While sleeping stood at second place…” and “Whereas, the figure for going out…”. Use fewer, more precise linking expressions and connect related comparisons within complete sentences. This would make the progression smoother and the relationships between figures clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of chart-reporting vocabulary, including “proportions,” “accounted for,” “represented,” and “smallest share.” These choices help communicate the data clearly, and the reader can understand all the comparisons. There is also some variation in how you describe percentages. At times, however, the wording is repetitive or not fully natural: “stood at third place,” “working shared the highest proportion,” and “represented the percentage of 7% each” are awkward collocations. “Utilized” is also less natural than “spent” when describing time. Aim for concise, conventional expressions such as “ranked third,” “accounted for,” and “each made up 7%,” while avoiding repeated use of “proportion” and “represented.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, and most of the figures remain understandable. The past-tense reporting is generally appropriate. Some sentence-boundary and punctuation problems remain, however. “While sleeping stood at second place…” and “Whereas, the figure…” are dependent clauses presented as separate sentences, while “Overall, In the year 1958” has unnecessary capitalisation after the comma. The opening overview also uses a comma splice between “followed by sleeping” and “Whereas…”. Improve control by joining dependent clauses to a main clause or rewriting them as complete sentences, and check punctuation and capitalisation. These corrections would make the varied structures more consistently accurate.

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