Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

this pie charts illustrates how adults work in a specific country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

we saw a considerable comparison between both countries,becuase we saw a huge difference in 1958, people spend alot of time on their work, after that they spend their mostly time on sleeping. their life are going own just working and slpeeing. which was the rest day, people spend their time with family and went out with friends.only 8% they feel relaxed at home.at the end just 2% they wnet for work to other city.

on the other side in 2008, people was ambitious about their future goals. they spend 42% on their work. we saw a big difference in working ratio. when they free from their work spend 25% on sleeping. they created a blance in their occupation and their lifes. in remaining time, they went for family and travelling also. the one thing was that they spend 7% on sports and also feel relaxation at home.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the two years and report several relevant figures, including working rising from 33% to 42%, sleeping falling from 32% to 25%, and relaxing at home reaching 13% in 2008. However, the response only partially summarises the charts: it gives no clear, concise overview of the main changes, and some important comparisons are omitted or vague. For example, going out with friends and family fell sharply from 19% to 6%, while travelling to work rose from 2% to 7%; these changes are not accurately set out. The claim that people travelled “to other city” is not supported by the chart. Focus on the largest increases and decreases, and describe the figures rather than speculate about ambition or lifestyle.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response by year, using “in 1958” and “on the other side in 2008,” so the reader can recognise the two periods being discussed. However, progression within each paragraph is difficult to follow: several activities are mentioned in a loose sequence, and the response lacks a distinct overview to guide the comparison. Linking phrases such as “after that,” “at the end,” and “in remaining time” do not always show clear relationships between the data. Some references, including “which was the rest day,” are unclear. Use a clear structure—introduction, overview, then grouped comparisons—and connect each figure directly to the activity and year it describes.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing the topic, including “difference,” “working,” “sleeping,” and “relaxation,” and the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are imprecise or unnatural for chart reporting, such as “working ratio,” “feel relaxed at home,” and “went for family.” Informal or speculative wording such as “ambitious about their future goals” does not describe information shown in the charts. Spelling errors, including “becuase,” “slpeeing,” and “wnet,” also make the writing less clear. Build a set of accurate reporting phrases, such as “accounted for,” “the proportion spent on,” and “increased from … to …,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to form longer sentences and make comparisons, but the range of structures is limited and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to interpret. Examples include “this pie charts illustrates,” “people was ambitious,” and “their life are going,” where agreement and verb forms are inaccurate. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also weak: several ideas run together, while the opening begins with a lowercase letter and commas are often attached to the preceding word. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, for example, “Working accounted for 33% in 1958 and 42% in 2008.” Then add controlled complex forms using “while” or “whereas,” checking subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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