Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two pie charts compares how the adults had spent their day by working in six different activities in 1958 and 2008.

overall, it was evident that working was accounted highest in both the years. while travelling to work and relaxing was the least in the beginning but it increased slightly. In contrast, going out with family/friends and sleeping was significantly decline.Additionally, play sports was not contributed earlier but later it provided its share.

In 1958, working was accounted for 33% which rises slightly to 42% in 2008 it share highest in all other activities. while relaxing was observed to 8% of its proportion which rose to 13% in 2008. The second highest category was seen in sleeping which was 32% in 1958, but it decline to 25% in 2008. However, travelling to work was stood at 2% in 1958, which also increases moderately to 7% in 2008.

Conversely, going with family and friends was 19% in 1958, was declined significantly to 6% in 2008. Therefore, newly added category was playing sports which was not there in 1958 but it contributed its proportion of 7% in 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

You identify the main overall pattern accurately: working takes the largest share in both years, while sleeping and going out decline, and the figures you give for all six activities match the chart. The overview also notes the new sports category, and the body supports the comparisons with relevant percentages. This gives the response strong coverage and a clear account of the key changes. To make the summary more fully developed, state the most striking contrast more explicitly—for example, that working rises by nine percentage points while going out falls by thirteen—and clarify that relaxing and commuting both increase. The phrase “least in the beginning” is imprecise because commuting, not relaxing, is the smallest category in 1958.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction and overview are followed by details for the two years’ main categories, with the decline in socialising given a separate paragraph. This makes the information generally easy to follow, and connectors such as “In contrast,” “Additionally,” and “Conversely” help signal comparisons. However, some links are mechanical or awkward, and the overview’s “while” and “Additionally” do not always connect the ideas smoothly. The final paragraph also begins with “Therefore,” although the sports category is an additional fact rather than a consequence. For stronger progression, group increases and decreases more deliberately and use clearer references, so each comparison follows naturally from the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “category,” “significantly,” and “moderately,” and the reader can understand the main comparisons. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, which limits precision: “working was accounted highest,” “relaxing was observed to 8%,” and “playing sports … contributed its proportion” are not natural ways to describe chart data. “Going with family and friends” also changes the chart’s label, “going out with friends/family.” Aim for standard reporting phrases such as “accounted for,” “stood at,” “rose to,” and “fell to,” and use them accurately. More precise vocabulary would make the comparisons clearer and reduce the effort required to interpret some sentences.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of sentence forms, including comparisons joined with “which” and “but,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors occur frequently in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “The two pie charts compares” needs subject–verb agreement, while “it decline to 25%” and “was declined significantly” use incorrect verb forms. The sentence beginning “In 1958, working was accounted for 33%” also runs into a second clause without clear punctuation, and “working was accounted for 33% which rises” shifts tense inconsistently. Practise describing past data with consistent past-tense forms and build shorter, complete comparison sentences before adding subordinate clauses.

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