Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This diagram illustrates that how the day is spent by working adults on various activities it may seem like the year 1958 has a good combo of working and sleeping but the catch here is that friends outgoing is cutting the time of travelling to work however , in year 2008 everything is balanced including the working sleeping and relaxing percentages. Year 2008 has combo of playing sports and travelling to work where'as balancing the friends outgoing too . If we compare both of these percentages it is clearly visible that the 2008 year is more stable then the 1958 because it has 19 percentage of friends outgoing which is cutting the travel for work percentage. To be precise the 2008 pie chart is showing more balanced and equal figures for all of the chores however if the 1958 chart had a few changes it would also be balanced if the sleeping time and going out with friends time is decreased and added to the travel for work timings

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response recognises that the charts compare how working adults spent their time in two years, and it attempts to identify broad differences, such as more time spent working in 2008. However, the account is largely interpretive rather than a clear summary of the data: claims that 2008 is “more balanced” or “more stable” are not supported by the figures, and the suggestion that going out reduced travel time is an invented relationship. Several key changes are omitted or unclear, including the fall in sleeping from 32% to 25%, the rise in travel from 2% to 7%, and the sharp decline in socialising from 19% to 6%. Report the main trends accurately and compare the categories directly, without proposing hypothetical changes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to compare the two years, using phrases such as “If we compare both” and “To be precise.” However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, and its ideas do not progress in a clear sequence from an overview to specific comparisons. Repeated claims that 2008 is “balanced” or “stable” take the place of organised reporting, while the final hypothetical suggestion about changing the 1958 chart distracts from the task. Some links between ideas are also unclear, particularly the claim that socialising is “cutting” travel time. Separate the overview from the details and group related changes together, using clear comparisons between the years.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant vocabulary, including “percentages,” “sleeping,” “travelling to work,” and “compare,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several informal or inaccurate expressions make the meaning difficult to follow. “Friends outgoing” and “combo” are not suitable descriptions for an academic chart summary, while “chores” does not accurately describe all the activities. Repeating “balanced” and “stable” also gives an imprecise impression of the data. Use precise terms for the categories and changes, such as “socialising,” “accounted for,” “increased,” and “declined,” and avoid conversational phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentence forms, including a comparison beginning “If we compare both,” but control is inconsistent and several sentences are difficult to parse. The opening construction, “illustrates that how the day is spent,” combines incompatible patterns; “it may seem like the year 1958 has” also shifts awkwardly between the chart and the year. Punctuation is frequently faulty, with missing sentence boundaries and spaces before commas, and the final sentence becomes overloaded with clauses. These problems sometimes obscure the intended comparisons. Build shorter, complete sentences first, then add controlled comparison structures such as “while” or “whereas,” checking clause structure and punctuation.

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