Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chart describes that how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

In the year of,1958 mostly adults spent their time in working and sleeping with the 32% and 33% respectively.Moreover,in the same year mature people spend their time to going out with family and friends with the number of 19%.However, only 2% young adults spending their time to travelling to work.Secondly,relaxing at home and playing sports in the year of 1958 spend their time approximately 7 to 8 percent both .

Working people of legal age spent their most time in the year of 2008 as compare to 1958. Meanwhile ,only 25 percent mature adults used their time in the sleeping activities as well as only 13 percent of the day individuals spent by relaxing at home.Lastly, playing sports,travelling to work and going out with their family and friends spent almost same time of amount with 6 to 7 percent in the year of 2008.

Overall,most of the adults spent their time working and sleeping in the year of 1958 and 2008 respectively.However,in 1958 younger adults spend 19% in 1958 but its fall down in 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the two years and report several relevant figures, including working and sleeping in 1958 and the 2008 figures for work, sleep and relaxing. However, some data are inaccurate or unclear: playing sports is not shown for 1958, and the 1958 figures for relaxing at home and travelling to work are 8% and 2%, not approximately 7–8% for both. The overview also says adults spent time working and sleeping “respectively” across the years, which does not clearly summarise the main changes. A stronger response would highlight that work and commuting increased, while sleep and socialising fell, and accurately compare the categories across both charts. The response addresses the task, but its overview and selection of key features remain limited.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with an opening, descriptions of the two years and a concluding overview. This gives the reader some organisation. However, progression between points is not always clear: “Secondly” does not introduce a clear second comparison, and “Lastly” groups three activities together without explaining their different changes. The overview repeats earlier information rather than drawing the main comparisons together. Linking words such as “Moreover,” “However” and “Meanwhile” are used, but sometimes mechanically or where the relationship between ideas is unclear. Organise the body into clear comparisons—for example, increases in work and travel, followed by decreases in sleep and socialising—and use references that make each year and activity easy to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing the charts, including “spent their time,” “working,” “sleeping” and “relaxing at home,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are unnatural or imprecise, such as “with the number of 19%,” “used their time in the sleeping activities” and “fall down.” Repeatedly calling adults “mature people,” “young adults” and “individuals” also creates inconsistency, especially when the chart refers to working adults. Choose direct, accurate terms and use common chart language such as “accounted for,” “rose,” “fell” and “share of the day.” These changes would make the comparisons clearer and more natural without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “Moreover” and “However,” but the response relies mainly on simple sentence patterns, and many sentences contain errors that make the meaning less clear. Examples include “The pie chart describes that how…” and “In the year of,1958 mostly adults spent…,” where sentence structure and punctuation are faulty. Verb forms and agreement are also inconsistent: “mature people spend” shifts tense, while “playing sports, travelling to work and going out … spent almost same time” does not form a clear grammatical comparison. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build sentences around clear subjects and verbs. For example: “In 1958, adults spent 33% of the day working and 32% sleeping.”

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